Lack of sleep may be my friend this week, and I may actually score an early spot in this cue! Yee-haw!
Each week on Friday Fictioneers, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields leads a group of writers from all over the globe, in a flash-fiction challenge. A single photo prompt; a story that has a beginning, middle and end; a goal of 100 words– everyone is welcome to participate. Check it out the details, and the wonderful stories in this week’s collection, here.
I always appreciate feedback, positive or constructive. Please leave a comment, and tell me what you think.
© Jean L. Hays
(98 Words)
“Could you please rub a little sunscreen on my back,” she whispered, his face just beside her.
He sat up and poured lotion in his palm. His hands caressed her soft skin, as he studied every freckle, every nuance of her perfect body.
“I think I would know your back anywhere, your skin and lines… no matter how many years pass, I could feel this body and know it’s yours.”
She smiled, taking in the deep cerulean water, the white sand, and his hands across her back.
Dolphins played and danced, as they made love in the sand.
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Dear Dawn,
My first thought when I saw your link was, “I hope you didn’t stay up waiting for the prompt.” 😉
Nice pleasant beach scene. I can hear the waves and smell the lotion.
Shalom,
Rochelle
PS Now get some sleep!
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Thanks Rochelle. I was up all night, and may be up for a while. Fortunately, I have FF to keep me company, and for that, I am truly grateful! Shalom!
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Phew!
AnElephant goes blushing into the shade.
Nicely done.
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Pink elephants are known to sun burn. AnElephant can’t be too careful. 😉 Thanks for coming by!
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Nice image for a snowy day.
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Yes! I could use some right about now!! Thanks for coming by, Lisa.
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You ARE up early, Dawn! Beautiful story!
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Thanks… it was an all nighter. Long story. :-p
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Very romantic, particularly on a winter’s day. 🙂
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Thanks Sandra. Yes, I suppose I am dreaming of warm relief right now. 😉
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sigh… i loved this. made me long for summer.
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Me too! Thanks KZ.
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Now I’ve got an image of fornicating dolphins in my mind. 😉 (Sorry. I couldn’t resist!)
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Now, I do too! Thanks for THAT! It wasn’t the dolphins making love… dork. 😉
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I know it wasn’t, but that’s where my brain went…
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Like I said: dork. That is just too funny… and cute… and you! I’m still sniggering.
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Yes, apparently the apples stay very close to the tree in my family.
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I love that! Those Elf tricks have had me grinning all week… perhaps my cousins, not so much. 😉
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Lovely–like a little vacation for my mind and soul. Well done!
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Glad you enjoyed it, Jan. Somehow December just screams: VACATION!
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Love it. But the first thing that popped into my mind after I read the last sentence was doing just that on a beach in Aruba. The sand gets everywhere and it is not pleasant!
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HAHAHAAH! Thanks for the image, Sue! I was trying to romanticize it, but I know you’re right. 😉
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I could smell the passion as well as the lotion, lol. Great Job 🙂
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THAT, is intriguing. 😉 Thanks, Helen.
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Beautiful described, darling. Wish I were there…
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Me too darlin’! In every respect. 😉 Thanks for taking the time… You were on my mind this week; hope you are feeling a little better?
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Oh, I’m doing better, I’d say. I’ve broken down and got some help… very tired — not sleeping very well as my body adjusts to the med — but I’m in better spirits, as evidenced by (da da da DAAAA shameless plug) http://wp.me/p3hJV8-ZP
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i love shameless.. most of the time. And glad you’re doing better! Getting help is the smart thing to do, for a very smart gal. It can really make so much difference, and just allow you to get back to YOU. No shame in help. No weakness… it’s called survival of the fittest. Now, I’m off to check out some shameless plug. 😉
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How the slathering of lotion does lead to wonder things.
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No doubt. Thanks JK.
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The subtle use of active, passionate language really lends itself to the success of your flash. Fiction. Flash fiction. Freudian slip…my bad.
My terrible attempt at wit aside, this is fantastic. I feel kind of trapped by prompts and I feel as if you captured the spirit of the photo prompt without sacrificing an almost erotic work’s integrity. I will study this, as I need to work this into my own prose.
Thank you for the wonderful prose, as well as the opportunity to learn from your style. Looking forward to my future Fictioneering.
CF
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Well thank you so much, and welcome to Tales From the Motherland. I really appreciate you taking the time to read my work and share such a thoughtful and specific feedback. It’s always good to hear what resonates and what doesn’t! This is the 2nd week in a row that I wrote too posts for the prompt… it’s so tempting. Last week I dabbled in VERY dark, and this week soft erotica. Nothing too daring, but I wanted some heat. Glad my flash… fiction worked for you. 😉 I will check out your entry and welcome to the “club.” I warn you, it’s highly addictive and truly rewarding! Please feel free to check out other posts on TFTM and share your thoughts. Many thanks.
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Hi Dawn. I think I’m a little in love with him. I can smell the suntan lotion. Perfect summer’s day here and you’ve made me want to go down to the beach…
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That sounds like a plan! And that means you’re in Oz… where do you live? I’ve spent a lot of time there; it’s dear to my heart. I think I’m a little in love with this man too… dream lovers; they are never the real thing. 😉
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We’re just north of Sydney. Never stop dreaming…
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Love the area! And no… I don’t plan to. 🙂
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I was awake until almost 5:00. Must be something going around! Or is yours jet lag induced? And you made the first row of Friday Fictioneers, too. Nice work, Dawn.
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Thanks Patti… no jet lag. I have not mentioned it here, but I’m in the hospital. Pretty serious, and I was up all night that night… and writing is what I do, in all times of stress, celebration, contemplation… I hope to be out in the next couple of days, but may be keeping strange hours for a while, as I get better. Thanks for reading, and your support.
Now, what’s your excuse for being up at such an unGodly hour???
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Caffeine, apparently. I had tea at a friend’s late evening, but it was supposed to be decaf. Methinks it wasn’t. I’m sorry to hear you are in the hospital. That would explain the hours, it’s hard to sleep there! Saying a prayer for a quick recovery. Hugs!
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Thanks Patti. Just got a cocktail of all kinds of sleepy things… methinks I won’t be able to think much longer, let alone type! Caffein so late in the day… almost always wreaks habit. 🙂
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you were quick off the mark! A sweet story, this one, and oh isn’t it lovely to have your back smoothed!
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I would love to have my back smoothed… but this is fiction! 😉 Thanks for taking the time Liz, and for sharing your thoughts. Much appreciated.
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It was a thrill to get in early, but doubt it will happen often. Posted at 3:30am my time! I’m glad you enjoyed this, and yes… having a back rub is fantastic; on a beach, divine! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!
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This is a lovely sensual piece Dawn i really enjoyed it. It is summer here in Australia and our weather at present is hot, lots of sunscreen being used, I hope. Nothing better is there than soaking into a lover.
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Where in Australia? I’ve been twice and love it there… and right now, envy your sun and warmth! We are waiting for snow tonight! Yes, I agree lotion and lovers, are a very good combination. 😉 Thanks so much for taking the time; always appreciated.
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I live on the east coast, Hunter Valley. Today was very hot, not much to envy in that.
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I’ve heard it’s been quite hot there recently! I traveled much of the east coast, and fell in love on every level. I’ve often wished I’d stayed. 🙂
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Well you can always come back.
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Alas… maybe. But not soon. 🙂
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I can’t stop laughing about the fornicating dolphins comment.
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No kidding! Carrie cracks me up!
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Mmm. That’s warm and intimate. Most excellent!
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Thanks EagleAye… I think we could all use a little of both, from time to time. Thanks for taking the time!
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Oh, I have those kind of moments all that time! That is, watching dolphins on reruns of Flipper, the rest of the stuff doesn’t happen. So beautifully described, though, almost felt like I was there….
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Do you need more sunscreen, Perry?
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That boy just might indeed! But, for the record… in case my husband reads this… I was not on the same beach as Perry! 😉
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Thanks Perry! The rest of the stuff is fiction… reruns it is! 😉
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Such a nice, happy, intimate scene. I want to go to the beach now.
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Me too!! Thanks Tiffany. 😀
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Passion in the surf…so early in the morning…it’s only 8:18 a.m. where I live. At 64, I can only remember those days so long, long ago… ha, ha.
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Frankly… me too! That’s why it’s fiction! 😉 Thanks Hugmama! I think we’re on the same time zone. I’m in WA state.
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Those dolphins are such voyeurs. I’m sure if you asked them they would say they were just were doing a scientific study of how other species mate. Don’t believe a word of it. Peeping toms every one.
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No doubt! Thank goodness for a little shrubbery. 😉 Thanks so much for stopping by, and taking the time to support me. Much appreciated!
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Ah, young love. If I had done that I would have had sand in places it shouldn’t be and we probably would have been ant bit. haha. Wonderful story of romance while the dolphins played. I enjoyed it!
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Thanks Jackie… yes, you are not the only one that thought about the sandy bits. Alas, it’s fiction, I can make that go away. 😉
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How perfectly lovely and dreamy, Dawn. I’ve always just loved that word “cerulean.” Oh, take me to this place!! Happy Holidays to you!
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Take me to this place too! Right now, it would be very welcome!! Thanks Amy… can’t wait to see what you’ve put up. Happy holidays to you as well!
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Oooo that last line made me swoon! 🙂
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Swoon away, girlie. I think we could all use a dose of sun and fun!
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nice
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Thanks so much! I appreciate you taking the time to read and respond.
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Thanks for sharing. Very nice.
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Tell your characters it’s more comfortable (no sand) in the Caribbean Sea at 2 am nude and in the belief that you’re the only couple around with the same idea. I too wondered if you were referring to the dolphins and the humans were the onlookers! It’s Christmas confession time! 🙂
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Hahahah! Those poor traumatized dolphins! I’ll keep the sand in mind… some sun and sand and Caribbean would be so good right now. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment; much appreciated. 😉
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Happy holidays.
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And to you as well!
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I am catching up and I see you have shared a different facet of your creative imagination – the sensuous, sexy side. Like the old movies that panned toward the window curtains as two lovers embraced, your writing implies everything while leaving much of the imagery for the reader to fill in. Subtle and tasteful like those qualities I know you are imbued with. – Mike
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Oh how you make me blush, my friend. It’s so wonderful to have friends and supporters in writing… I’m grateful for 2014, and finding you. 😉 All the best as you and Florence move on to Spain!
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