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I am honored to have my photo featured this week. It is of a bathroom in Barbados, strangely enough. I found it striking, to say the least. However, why it took me to the continuation of this story, this morning… is the mystery of writing. Click on these links to read parts one, two, and three, if you’re interested.
I always welcome constructive feedback or a thoughtful comment. My goal for 2014 is to really build my blog and FB page. It’s my birthday (1/9), so help me celebrate by stopping by Tales From the Motherland, or the TFTM Facebook page, and hit Like. I will smile all day. Thanks for reading!
(100 words, exactly)
“Joni Mitchell?” Henry nodded toward the young woman wiping the counter.
“Sorry? Joni, who?”
“The song you were singing– Both Sides Now by Joni Mitchell.”
“Maybe. Something catchy I heard. You know it?” She grabbed a ketchup.
“It’s a song about love, my wife Marjorie’s favorite–” His voice trailed off as she poured his coffee.
“Does she sing it too?” She asked absently.
“She’s gone now… Along with my fairy tales of love.”
She turned back around with napkins in her hand. “What was that?”
“Nothing.” Henry stared at the milky cloud in his coffee and stirred it silently.
Now, enjoy Joni Mitchell, singing one of my favorite songs:
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This is great and I like the tie-in with the song. Beautful picture as well. I’m sure you’ll be interested to see how everyone uses it. 🙂
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I was totally surprised to wake up and see my photo on the page! Took me a second, actually. Yes, I can’t wait to see where it goes… though I have a hunch. 😉 Thanks David; I’m glad you enjoyed my story and my photo.
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For my birthday today, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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Love the pic, Dawn. Very interesting place for a bathroom! Your story continues to grow and develop. I look forward to seeing where you take it. Might be interesting to do longer installments as a serial novel or short story on the blog outside of FF?
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It would be interesting, Cathy… but not sure I want to go any quicker than this. I don’t know where it’s going, until the right photo shows up. 😉 Glad you like the photo too. Yes, it was a very strange place to find it… never did get the story of why it’s there.
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I was waiting for “You’re So Vain” but you tripped me up. A bathroom?? I was wondering but never would have guessed that.
janet
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That would be a great photo too! For another story… I’m pretty sure no one would guess this one, so the stories should be interesting. 😉
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Janet did it again! I was going to mention that I found it interesting that your title was from Carly Simon’s song. A bathroom? Gah! Never would have guessed.
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Ok, well… even though I love Carly Simon, I did not know she had a song about clouds in coffee, but I’m off to check it out now! I was thinking of the clouds from Joni’s song. Gah! Indeed. 😉
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Ok, so now I feel doubly thick! I looked it up and see it’s the title of an album (?); I can’t find the song. I love the songs on that album, just didn’t know the title. Or, I’m just floundering with the continued spaciness from recovery… GAH! I’m adding: For my birthday today, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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You’re So Vain?
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/You're_So_Vain
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Ok, so now I’m totally confused. :-p
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Also a single release, but from Carly’s album No Secrets.
Rochelle was right; today’s post was a double threat(treat; )
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😀
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thank you for sharing this picture; it’s an awesome photo 🙂 i liked the story, the sadness was intensified by how the waitress (or probably everyone around him) was too busy to notice his loneliness.
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Thanks KZ, that’s what I was going for… with the story. The photo is just so fun, especially knowing what it is. When I saw this, on the beach, it totally captivated me. I am dying to see where others take it. Thanks for the feedback; much appreciated!
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Here’s me being obnoxious: For my birthday today, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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liked. happy birthday 🙂
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You rock! Thanks. 😀
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LOVE that photo! I was just joking with my husband that we’ve officially become old and parents now that we sing bits of songs that remind us of things and the kids look at us like we’re crazy because they don’t know what we’re talking/singing about. I love the milky cloud detail – it’s my favorite part of a cup of coffee and one of my endless photo challenges. I’ve missed bits of this, thanks for the links above, now I’m curious to see if the characters come back:)
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Hey Lillian! So good when you come by. 😀 Hard to know what will happen with these characters, as the photos dictate it. I haven’t thought into the future with either character; I simple see a prompt and it take me there, or doesn’t. When I submitted the photo, this was the furthest thing from my mind. Welcome to the crazy parent’s club! I joined eons ago. 😉
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For my birthday today, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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How cool that your picture was chosen! What an interesting bathroom. And I loved your story. 🙂
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Yes, cool indeed! I was totally surprised when I saw it, in the wee hours of the morning. Couldn’t sleep and this is where it took me. Thanks for stopping in, Carrie. It’s always a party when you show up. 😉
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Ha! Not in real life, it isn’t. 🙂
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I said that intentionally… and when I get my sorry but out your way, it will be. :-p
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Needless to say, I just went into hiding.
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I am the Finder of all lost things. But trust me, you will be happy I found you. 😉
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🙂 🙂
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Love that song too. Great photo.
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Thanks Lisa. Love the song, love the photo… um, the writing? The writing! Just kidding. Glad you stopped by. 😉
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A good story I went back to the beginning it follows through nicely.
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Thanks Silently… This story has a life of its own. It just comes to me with certain photos, and in between, it lies waiting. Glad you like it, and really appreciate you taking the time to read it all.
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Lovely story with its melancholy nature. I went back and read them all in succession and knew Marjorie was speaking to him in the cafe. P.S. love the photo and even more so now that I know its a bathroom. Though I wish I had written my story before I had that info. Oops.
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Thanks! I hesitated to let folks know what it is, but then know that every week I am wondering about the photos. I really appreciate you taking the time to read all 4; thanks! Glad you like it a whole piece.
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Great photo! Looks like a fine place to … meditate. I saw Joni Mitchell several times when I was far wee-er than now, but she was most remarkable at the Hollywood Bowl. She was very young, beautiful and shockingly talented. I still get goosebumps when I hear Song to a Seagull! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LBGqGZ9GWzE
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Thanks Susan. Glad you enjoyed the music. She is amazing! I’ll check out Song to Seagull.
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Ouf. That’s the first and only thought that came to my mind after I read this week’s Friday dictioneers. It’s a good ouf, I guess, the one that makes me think about “too late” and if it is ever “too late” unless, well, someone dies. Eeesh.
Thank you for the wonderful short story!!
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Thanks Yara. I hope you now wonder… does even death mean it’s the end? I think not.
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Aww such a lovely tale, I’m loving Joni Mitchell 😉
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Joni is amazing! My friend Susan shared another link in the comments… gorgeous song! Glad you enjoyed both. 🙂
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For my birthday today, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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I was away and had missed the third installment of this story. It’s building into a nice series. Love the way you wrote this scene.
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Thanks Mike. This story has a life of its own. I have no idea where it’s going, until the photo takes me there… even when it’s my photo (like this one), it’s a surprise! 😉
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Read all the installments of your story and look forward to more. Well done. Great photo (rather curious about the logistics of that bathroom, however).
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Thanks so much for taking all of that time! I really appreciate the effort and the feedback. The bathroom, well that remains a mystery. My guess: either the building that housed it was destroyed in a storm, leaving only this… or, well hmm… it washed up? 😉
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Hi Dawn, just dropped in from Lynda’s Farmlet… Call it crude, but I’ve a sneaky feeling that it’s not just that the building is intended for “washing up” but, more importantly, a question of what “washes out”, if you get my drift? TRUE outdoor plumbing and not too far to carry the water LOL!
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Not crude at all! Scary right, is my guess. I’m really glad you stopped by! Hope you’ll stay a while and check out a few things on TFTM. 🙂
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I like this little clip of life. A scene that probably happens more often than we could ever imagine.
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You’re probably right Linda! Thanks for reading and sharing some feedback; much appreciated!
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Interesting slice of life, and I am always a sucker for musical references. Well done!
Also, thank you for such an original photo! It has inspired such a wide variety of stories–a perfect choice for a Friday Fictioneers prompt 🙂
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Thanks so much Jan. I was excited to see my photo there, and have all day today to read the stories… can’t wait! For my birthday, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers to stop by my FB page and hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. 😉 https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland Thanks again for taking the time to read and comment! Much appreciated, Jan.
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A lovely clip of life, and I love that song!
Amazing photo – a very strange bathroom in Barbados! 🙂
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For sure! I never did find out how it got there… but loved the scene. Glad you did as well. 🙂 Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment; much appreciated!
For my birthday today, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. 😉 https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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Done 🙂
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Thanks! That makes you 300!! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=barWV7RWkq0
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I noticed that!
The cheering crowd is a nice touch 🙂
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You made my day!
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Dear Dawn,
Another Joni Mitchell fan here. Nicely played. Two of my favorite songs in one story. You captured the man’s longing and loneliness in a natural setting. Beautifully understated and touching.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks so much Rochelle. I’m so glad that so many writers have loved the photo! What a surprise to see it on the page, when I clicked your post. 🙂 I’m honored that you like the story. Personally, it’s hard to imagine anyone not liking that song! Your time and kind comment are much appreciated.
For my birthday today, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. 😉 https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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My favourite piece so far this week. Just wonderful dialogue, where both characters are engrossed in their own heads, but are still communicating. Lovely.
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Wow, thanks so much Claire. I really appreciate that kind and thoughtful feedback. This story has taken on a life of its own. All 4 parts just came when I saw the photo, and it’s been fun to imagine what will come next. Honestly, I try not to think too much ahead, but wonder what photos will come. Given that this was my photo, funny that it hadn’t occurred to me before. 😉 It was the fairy tale image that caught me off guard. Thanks again for your generous comment.
For my birthday today, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. 😉 https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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Funny how many of the fictioneers are fans of Joni Mitchell. I think she crops up somewhere most weeks!! I liked your dialogue here – great example of talking without speaking, as it were. Thanks for the photo – I found it tough but got there eventually.
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I am spending this morning reading the posts and really having fun seeing where my photo took people. Honestly, I hadn’t thought of this story when I sent the photo to Rochelle, some time ago. And yes, the Joni piece does seem to be a trend with our fellow FFs! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment; it is always appreciated.
For my birthday today, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. 😉 https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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Thanks for sharing my link! 🙂
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How sad and sweet! Very heartfelt. I just want to reach out and put my hand on his shoulder in comfort. Congrats on getting your photo featured…it must be cool to see all the stories being inspired by it! I can’t believe that is a bathroom…interesting.
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Tiffany, I think he could use that hand on his shoulder. This (now) 4 part story just has a life of its own. I’m not sure what Henry will do, or Marjorie for that matter. The photos dictate. Ironically, when I sent this photo– a while back, this story was no where in my thoughts! Yes, it was really fun to see my own photo out there and it has been great reading the stories so far! I had no time yesterday, but I’m taking this morning to get through as many as possible. Thanks so much for taking the time. 😀
For my birthday today, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. 😉 https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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I’ve really been enjoying the story so far, even if it is sad. I look forward to seeing where else it will take you! How ironic indeed. Funny how things work out that way. I won’t get to my story contribution until tomorrow, but I hope you’ll have a moment to see it! You’re welcome. 🙂
It’s your birthday? Well, happy birthday! I hope it’s been a wonderful day for you, and that you will have many blessings throughout the next year. 🙂 Of course I will hit the like button! This may just let me see your posts even faster. 🙂
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Thanks Tiffany! I always put all posts on that page, right away. I think if you hit like, you then get notifications! Hopefully, they don’t drive you mad. 😉 Of course I’ll read yours!
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You’re welcome! Great! I am following your blog via WordPress, but sometimes those notifications get a little lost. Oh, they won’t. 🙂 Thanks! I should hopefully have my post up by noon today.
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This is poignant. I enjoyed your attention to the waitress’ actions. It helped to put the reader right in the middle as an observer. I never let myself read anyone’s stories until I have pushed the publish button on my own. Apparently, you and I were on a similar wavelength. Love Joni, and your picture. Thank you for sharing it!
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Lynda, I’m spending this morning reading as many stories as I can today, as I was gone most of yesterday. Like you, I never read other stories until mine is done– too influencing. So, it’s always fun to find ones that run on a similar wavelength. It happens fairly often… either with my own stories, or other stories that I notice are similar to other stories in the collection. So glad you liked the picture. When I sent it, my story was nowhere in my thoughts; funny how that works!
For my birthday today, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. 😉 https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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Oh shoot! Forgot to say thanks for a little hit of Joni (did you notice how BIG that guitar looks?; ) LOVE this song; it rips my heart out no matter how many times I hear it…
(Also enjoyed your little note re plagiarism and advertising – right on!; )
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Oh double shoot (and drat too!) Happy Birthday!!
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You are SO sweet! We just met… you don’t have to worry. 😉 So kind of you though.
For my birthday today, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) and readers to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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It’s a song well worth knowing! Glad you enjoyed so many things. Makes me feel successful. 😉
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Happy Birthday, Dawn! I already know you had lobster and chocolate cake, so I have a feeling you are enjoying your birthday and doing it in fine style. Way to go! I enjoyed this a lot. I’ll be interested to see where you take this. Fairy tales of love…will he ever trust love again?
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Thanks Amy. The lobster fell thru, but crab is a good substitute. 😉 I’m glad you enjoyed this post… not sure where this story is going, honestly, but it’s safe to say that it’s in the photo prompts. 😉
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Happy birthday! This is a great photo, I had several directions for a story come to mind. I thought of it as an elevator and office cubicle…but not a bathroom! I always liked that song, too.
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Thanks Patti! I am having a great time reading the different directions people went. When I took the photo, I certainly never imagined all of these photos! 😉 Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment; it’s always appreciated!
For my birthday today, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) and readers to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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The line “clouds in the coffee” made me think of “You’re So Vain” by Carly Simon. I love “Both Sides Now” too. But then again, I really don’t know clouds at all.
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Very clever… 😉 Somehow, I totally missed the Carly Simon one. This means that a) I’m clueless b) I am inadvertently brilliant and could be writing for Carly Simon c) all of the above.
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i felt the man’s pain over his loss…love your story and thank you for the interesting photograph. Happy birthday and happy 2014! 🙂
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Thanks Sun! This story has been continuing and I’m curious to see where it will go. I’m so glad the photo and story touched you. They both are special to me. 🙂
In the meantime: For my birthday (Jan 9th), I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) and readers to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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Awesome – you are definitely blessed with talent!!!
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Wow, thanks! I appreciate this kind comment. I’m glad you liked it and appreciate the time you took to read and comment.
Also, For my birthday January 9th, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) and readers to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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Pimp On Girlfriend Pimp On – consider it done…now link up to my first party!!!
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What party? Link up?? How do I do that?
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Check out my blog post today –
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Will do.
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Ok, so I read the post (and the ziti looks awesome!), and really enjoyed your site. However, this is far more than I’m willing to do. I don’t follow anyone unless I’ve read a LOT of their work, and there are several hosts that I need to follow here. I consider it a commitment, and don’t want to say I’ll follow and then not read. I also don’t have the time to follow the link up as it progresses. I am more than happy to like a FB page, or a post but this is a much bigger commitment than I can do, time wise. So sorry. I hope you understand.
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Yes and that is quite alright – as long as you visit me from time to time!
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That I’ll do! Just copied the ziti recipe, to try later. 🙂
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oops – HAPPY BELATED BIRTHDAY!!!!!!!!
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Thanks! 😀
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Happy Belated Birthday! Great story, a bit sad, but very well written. 🙂
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Thanks Jackie. Yes, it is a bit sad; a continuation of a “sad” story of loss, but glad you liked it. Thanks for the birthday greetings; it was a fun day!
Also, For my birthday January 9th, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) and readers to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Years resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and platform. This is me, pimpin. https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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I did go to your facebook page and like. The least I could do. 🙂
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Not the least at all. SO grateful! Thanks Jackie!!
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A great story and I love Joni Mitchell and the song was such a treat! Thanks and hope you had a great birthday! Nan (from Kansas)
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Thanks so much Nan! I’m happy that you enjoyed both the story and the music. My birthday was indeed nice; thanks. I appreciate the time you took to read and comment; it always means a lot. 🙂
So, for my birthday January 9th, I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) and readers to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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I think it says a lot of how men would express sorrow.. For only an instant reaching out, and then he deals it with himself.
And the picture was great.. Had never guessed a rest-room. A belated birthday greetings.
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Thanks Björn. I do think that a lot of men handle grief, emotions, a lot of things… differently than women, but particularly a man of Henry’s generation. He isn’t sure what to do with his sense of loss and loneliness, after Marjorie’s sudden death. I’m glad you enjoyed the photo; it’s one of my favorites too. And my birthday was lovely, thanks. 😉
So, for my birthday I am going out on a limb and asking my fellow writers (only on my own post) and readers to stop by my FB page to hit Like. No obligation, but my New Year’s resolution was to push myself to advocate for my writing and “platform.” This is me, pimpin’. https://www.facebook.com/TalesFromTheMotherland
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Already did the like.. 😉
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You rock. Thanks so much! Our fingers crossed on the cyber key board. You were hitting like, and I was inserting note. Thanks for being a good egg. 😉
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A bathroom, huh? Well I would have never guessed that! Your story made me melancholy. I am unable to view the YouTube right now but your title has me singing one of my favorite tunes.
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Well apparently I confused a few people. I didn’t know there was a Carly Simon title Clouds in My Coffee the song is Joni Mitchell’s Both Sides. Alas I’m either totally clueless or brilliant enough to have thought of the same title that Carly thought of! 😉 Sorry the story made you melancholy. It’s part 4 of a fairly sad story. I think the theme of lasting love has its own redemptive importance, but I see why so many people found it sad. Right now I’m working on a longer version of the story (using all 4 points and expanding it) for an online magazine who asked me to send a short story. Thanks for taking the time, Dawn there are tons of uplifting tales this week, so I’m sure you’ll find something to lift your spirits! Ironically, when I took this photo, I saw only fantasy and color.
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Carly Simon’s song is “You’re so Vain”. and don’t be sorry, it’s good to be melancholy at times.
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I know it’s You’re So Vain, but apparently when people saw Clouds In His Coffee, they expected that song. Gah.
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Love that song – Neil Diamond has done a great cover of it too http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gYaRlH82K2M.
But back to the story – I loved it and Clouds in his Coffee is an apt title. Toilet in Barbados huh? Who would have thunk…but thank you for providing the prompt then.
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Thanks Subroto! I love this photo, and was totally surprised when I went up those steps and found a bathroom! Never learned the story behind it, but love the stories all the FFs are coming up with! I’ll check out Neil; I’m a long time fan. 🙂 Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my story; much appreciated!
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