I’m late, late, late this week… I’ve been in Denver for parent’s weekend at my son’s school. Such fun times together, but no time for anything else. Humble apologies for late submission and tardiness in reading all of your great stories!
A warning, this photo has a very disquieting quality to it, that pulled me in a dark direction. The focus on the closest cars, while the others are distorted and blurred, the rain. It give me the creeps. I apologize in advance for the language and unsettling topic. A writer’s gotta’ write what the muse inspires.
Friday Fictioneers is a weekly flash fiction challenge with a photo prompt. Use it to create a 100-word story. If you are interested in joining this merry band of writers, from all over the world, check out Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s blog Addicted to Purple. As Always, I welcome honest, constructive feedback; please leave a comment.
I Got You Babe
Stupid bitch. As if a little rain would stop me? Park under a light and wait it out? I’m far more patient than you know.
I’ll wait in the shadows, baby doll–– with those pretty eyes watching for a break in the rain. Nervous? Afraid you’ll get wet, but more afraid of the dark… You should be.
You don’t even notice me. You’re all the same.
I can smell your fear, taste it–– sweet and salty, like the last one’s… and the one before her.
Sit and wait. I’ve got time.
I love the rain; it washes away the evidence.
(word count: 100)
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Absolutely gave me the creeps. Well written as always, and just love your last line. Excellent Dawn.
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Thanks Dee. Yes, frankly, I hesitated to publish this one… so dark. But, it’s where this photo took me. All week that image has bothered me. Had to write it. I appreciate you reading and sharing your feedback.
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That’s a real serial killer, Dawn. This sounds like the hook for a crime thriller. It’s a little diferent than your usual story, but well written , spooky. — Suzanne
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Thanks for sharing my work!
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Thanks for sharing my work!
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Thanks Suzanne. While this a departure from my usual, it’s fun to try new things. Glad it spooked you; that was my intent. 😉
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Dear Dawn,
Dark, haunting, disturbing and very well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle. Those are things I was hoping for. 🙂
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Chilling, Dawn. That last line really seals in the coldness and darkness of this. Well done.
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Thanks Amy. Everything about this photo gives me the heeby jeebies!
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The picture of the story is really clear! Glad i got to read this stuff.
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Thanks for stopping by Tales From the Motherland! I appreciate your time, and hope you’ll read more. 🙂
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Dawn,
You tapped right into the mind of a predator this week. It is hard to shake the dark muse. The prompt does bring the creepy. Well done.
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Thanks so much Steph. I found this photo very disturbing, and my head right to the dark.
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Am I ever glad I decided to go see if there were any more submissions!
Great job, Dawn… so cold and creepy!
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I’m glad you’re glad, Dale… it’s not for everyone! The dark stuff is always a different cup of tea, but this week that’s all I saw there. Thanks for your feedback!
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Well, dear, you certainly did go a bit on the dark side this week. And did a darn fine job of it, too. baby doll ~ somehow this is the creepiest line of all (for me).
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It’s the creepiest line to me, as well, Alicia. Glad you liked it, and so appreciate your feedback!
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I love it! Turning to the dark side, just in time for Halloween. This post is like so many scary movies that are popular at this time of year, it’s like taking the Trick part of Trick or Treat to the ultimate level. – Mike
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Thanks Mike! It’s fun to play with new genres, and while this isn’t my usual gig, it’s fun to experiment. 🙂
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