Friday Fictioneers: The End of Love


Welcome to Friday Fictioneers, the best Flash Fiction in town! Check out our ring leader, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ blog, Addicted to Purple, for more details. Rochelle provides a weekly photo prompt; participants respond with a 100-word story with a beginning, middle and end.  The challenge brings in writers from all over the globe, and makes for an incredibly supportive, positive writing group!

This week, I was honored to be invited by Rochelle to participate in the “My Writing Process Blog Tour. ”  If you’re dying to know how I make this magic (wink wink, nod nod), check out my interview here.  Since posting that, one of the agents who was considering my current novel, contacted me. Her simple email “I’m intrigued. Could you please send 20 more pages and a synopsis?” made my week! Here we strive to tell a story in 100 words, and the Finesman Agency rocked my world in 12!  Fingers are crossed, making typing extra challenging.  Next week, you can find out how fellow Fictioneers Adam Ickes and Helena Hann-Basquiat do what they do; stay tuned!

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

(99 words)

The End of Love

From the start it was a battle: her Orthodox family, against my “unacceptable,” Reformed Jewish background. But we loved each other.

“Damn you all!”

I clutched the simple note– a few words rendering my world empty and colorless– in my fist, and left the tape clinging to the cold metal.

Joshua,

My father forbids it.  Don’t try to find me. It’s over.

Miriam

All our plans and promises– how could she leave only a note, taped to the elevator? I believed we were stronger.

Defeated, I threw the paper in the trash and stepped out into the gray, lifeless city.

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About Dawn Quyle Landau

Mother, Writer, treasure hunter, aging red head, and sushi lover. This is my view on life, "Straight up, with a twist––" because life is too short to be subtle! Featured blogger for Huffington Post, and followed on Twitter by LeBron James– for reasons beyond my comprehension.
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41 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: The End of Love

  1. First of all, Congratulations, Dawn, on the agent showing more interest in your book! That sounds really promising. I wish you all the best. Second, that was a clever use of the piece of tape in the prompt. Very creative and well done. Good story.

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  2. Honie Briggs says:

    And that was that, was it? He went and got a cafe to drown his sorrows and fell for the barista. Fickle fella!

    How exciting that your interview post attracted some attention. Happy writing!!

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    • Actually, the interview post had nothing to do with it. This agent has not seen my blog. Just coincidence… but an exciting week nonetheless!

      I suppose our young lover, has just gotten the message… perhaps a barista will benefit, but unlikely. I believe his heart is broken. Thanks Honie!

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  3. Amy Reese says:

    Oh, this is dreary and sad. She must have worried he wouldn’t see it. I hope Joshua doesn’t give up. Great story, Dawn.

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  4. El Guapo says:

    A battle that still rages on. My version was much easier.

    Well done! If I may ask – what about the elevator inspired the rest of the story (besides taping the note)?

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  5. Carrie Rubin says:

    My fingers are crossed for you agent-wise. Good luck and congrats!!

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  7. Cathy Ulrich says:

    How exciting to hear from the agent! I noticed the tape too, Dawn. You did a great job of bringing it to life! So sad, so star-crossed…

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  8. Mike Lince says:

    Unrequited love, one of mankind’s most enduring themes, is brought to life in your excerpt. Who cannot relate? What strikes me is how much of the story is told in so few words, just like the succinct email from the agent – eloquent in its brevity. I wish you the greatest of luck in the outcome with the agent, and I await in hopes of good news. – Mike

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  9. JudahFirst says:

    This is a great story. Love it, Dawn!

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  10. Excellent story Dawn. Life is not always what we want is it. I sympathise with your protagonist.

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  11. I try to read all the stories and am deeply impressed with what everyone can do with only 100 words. Having said that. BEST USE OF THE PHOTO PROMPT EVER TALESFROMTHE MOTHERLAND!!!! Also I felt his pain as the color and life went out of his world when he realized Mirriam wasn’t strong enough to choose him over her family. Poor man. There is no easy way of ending a love affair. The note suggested to me kindness as to where it was left. A special rendezvous point perhaps.

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    • Oh, my. Thank you SO much Sarah! I am speechless; and that doesn’t happen often. 😉 Thank you so much for your incredibly kind words. I really love FF and it means a lot to me that one of my fellow Fictioneers feels that way. Thanks.

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  12. I’m glad someone went with the tape, and you teased the ideas out wonderfully, Dawn. A sad star-crossed lovers story movingly told.

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  13. K.Z. says:

    first of all, Dawn, CONGRATULATIONS!!! really excited for you. 🙂 🙂 i’ll go check out your interview.
    i enjoyed your story this week, as always. it was heartbreaking but effortlessly executed.

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  14. Chowderhead says:

    I’m going to do this soon…

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