Friday Fictioneers: I’ll Take Your Word


Love this photo prompt from Jean L. Hays; it offers so many options and possible directions to go. I am opting to be intentionally vague; this could be any number of situations. Thanks to the intrepid Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, who wrangles this weekly group of Flashers. Check out the photo and write a 100-word (or less); then spend some time reading the stories that the Fictioneers write. This is one of my favorite things I do each week! Join the fun or find the other stories on Rochelle’s blog, Addicted to Purple.

As always, constructive, honest feedback is welcome. Leave a comment; I’d love to hear what you think. Happy New Year Y’all!

© Jean L. Hays

© Jean L. Hays

 I’ll Take Your Word   (99 words)

“Where do we begin?”

“Honestly, I don’t know what to say.”

“I don’t either, but if we can just try to get back on track, I can live with that.”

“It’s complicated. Where do we start?”

“Isn’t this a start? Aren’t we starting right now?”

“This? We haven’t done anything yet.”

“Well, I don’t know what it should look like, but this seems as good a place to start as anywhere.”

“I want to believe that, but what does ‘on track’ even mean?”

“We’re talking; we’re listening; we’re sitting with our feet in the fire. That’s where we begin.”

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Mother, Writer, treasure hunter, aging red head, and sushi lover. This is my view on life, "Straight up, with a twist––" because life is too short to be subtle! Featured blogger for Huffington Post, and followed on Twitter by LeBron James– for reasons beyond my comprehension.
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59 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: I’ll Take Your Word

  1. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Dawn,

    I loved the line…’..we’re sitting with our feet in the fire.’ This was a good tale told through well spoken conversation. I loved it and applaud you for bringing it to life. I was there a week ago and am still in hotfoot country.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  2. Dear Dawn,

    At least there’s communication here and with their feet warming by the fire, perhaps they can avoid the cold war I’m all too familiar with. Relationships can be complicated. Spot on dialogue.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Feast or famine– that’s so often the issue! Despite the burn, my husband and I still rush to the flames, and or languish in the cold, when rapprochement is so much nicer. Thanks for the kind feedback, Rochelle. As always, it’s much appreciated! d

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  3. Talking is more productive than running away. Nice dialogue.

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  4. Which way, which way. You capture a turning point so well, Dawn.

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  5. Margaret says:

    Lovely. They’re definitely on track. Beautiful portrayal of sincerity and good-heartedness, notwithstanding some confusion and maybe even disappointment. I can hear all this in your dialogue. Great writing.

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  6. Honie Briggs says:

    I’m beginning my mediation practicum in a few weeks. This dialogue sounds very much like where two people would be at the beginning of an opening session. I think it is a perfect example of how many of us feel when treading into unknown territory. Excellent example of a real human experience.

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  7. Marian says:

    Good one, Dawn

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  8. Carrie Rubin says:

    Wonderful interpretation. If what they say is true, each day really is a new beginning. We have to start somewhere.

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  9. susanissima says:

    Love, especially, the last line and within that “feet in the fire.” Nice.

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  10. Dawn, Good story done with conversation. At least they’re talking, and as was said, that’s a beginning. Well done as always. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  11. We do this at our Friday Writing practice – stories told only through conversation. You’ve done a stellar job with this, which I never seem to do. Kudos, dear.

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  12. Talking is especially important in relationships, Dawn, as your story points out so well.

    janet

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  13. plaridel says:

    great dialogue through and through. well done.

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  14. Good one! It reminded of the infamous, “Where do you want to go eat?” “I don’t care, where do you want to go eat?” “But I asked you.” “But I am asking you!” “I said I don’t care.” … LOL!!

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  15. Amy Reese says:

    If they’re starting with their feet in the fire, I think it can only get better. It can’t get any worse, can it? Great dialogue and direction to take for the prompt. They are talking and that is a start. For some, they can be the hardest part. Nice one!

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  16. pattisj says:

    I couldn’t help noticing feet IN the fire. Hope they get it all ironed out.

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  17. Sandra says:

    Well they’ve made a start. But so would I if my feet were in the fire. It’s a good line to illustrate their situation. Well done.

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  18. draliman says:

    Well, you’ve got to start somewhere, at least they’ve opened the lines of communication!

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  19. At least they are in the same place and communicating! A well-captured moment. I love the ‘feet in the fire’ image. 🙂

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  20. rgayer55 says:

    We all have different perceptions of where the starting line is as well as the finish. Very real dialogue, which you tend to write extremely well.

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  21. I can feel the tension. Cautiously optimistic. Like they’ve tried and failed before, but want to try again. Aren’t willing to give up yet. At least the voice of the first person is optimistic. Not quite so sure about the second. Always fascinated where you go with each photo prompt.

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  22. Great dialogue. Sometimes any beginning is a good one.
    -David

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  23. Glad to see them begin, and I hope they will get somewhere. I know all about beginnings that peter out and anger and disappointment that follows. But great dialogue and a true sense of hopefullness does pervade the piece. Thanks, Dawn!

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  24. wildbilbo says:

    Interesting dialogue, I was challenged to untangle it in some parts. It’s clearly one of those conversations between people who have known each other for a long time, and the meanings are full of an unseen history, and are deeper than simply what’s said.

    I liked the line about starting, it reminded me of a quote:
    “A story has no beginning or end: arbitrarily one chooses that moment of experience from which to look back or from which to look ahead.”
    ― Graham Greene, The End of the Affair

    I think these people are looking for a new beginning, and are in the process of drawing a line in the sand.

    Cheers
    KT

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  25. Dee says:

    They have know each other a long time I guess, hope they just keep talking and listening…
    So many relationships flounder because we stop listening and miss the all the warning signals.
    Well written as always Dawn

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  26. All I can think of is the Scarecrow pointing both ways down the Yellow Brick Road and saying “Then again, some people go both ways.” The line about feet in the fire is wonderfully ambiguous — fire can warm or burn, right?

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    • Exactly! Generally, it refers to the idea that unless we’re willing to sit with some discomfort, and get burned a little, we won’t grow or change. It’s something I really believe. I appreciate you stopping by, Helena. It is a rare and lovely treat.

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  27. subroto says:

    Always good to talk when you are “sitting with our feet in the fire”. Or maybe just talk. Nice one.

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  28. Mike Lince says:

    I enjoyed the storytelling via dialogue. I had not seen that from you before, at least not dialogue exclusively. I found it to be realistic in that I have felt my own feet in the fire in similar conversations. I felt the tension in the dialogue because these conversations can just as easily remain circular as opposed to leading to a route out. – Mike

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  29. Nan Falkner says:

    Dawn, love your story and the dialogue. It’s time to turn over or your feet will burn! Great job, Nan 🙂

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  30. Loved it, it has such an intimate fell. I felt like I was an intruder, invading their shared intimacy. This one really shines.

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