Friday Fictioneers: Drained.


Such great prompts the past few weeks, and I’ve been MIA! Life has thrown some serious curve balls, and I’m trying to keep them all in the air. I had to rally this week; loved the photo too much to pass it up! It’s likely that I’ll miss more in the coming weeks, but oh how I’ve missed my flash fiction friends!

Friday Fictioneers is orchestrated by our talented leader Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. If you’d like to read more stories from this week, or learn more details, visit her blog Addicted to Purple. This week’s photo prompt comes from Sean Fallon. As always, I appreciate honest, constructive feedback; please leave a comment!

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© Sean Fallon

 

Drained

“Everything in its place,” Joy’s mother demanded, and Joy followed rules.

She married a man who was conservative and proper, and then kept his life orderly and neat. She raised their two children, a girl and a boy, in a tidy home with homemade meals and structure. Dishes never sat dirty; laundry never waited–– everything in its place.

There were few thank yous; her family came to expect what they wanted, when they wanted it.

On her fiftieth birthday, Joy packed a bag and left. No note, no apologies; she simply broke all the rules at once.

(Word count: 100)

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About Dawn Quyle Landau

Mother, Writer, treasure hunter, aging red head, and sushi lover. This is my view on life, "Straight up, with a twist––" because life is too short to be subtle! Featured blogger for Huffington Post, and followed on Twitter by LeBron James– for reasons beyond my comprehension.
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53 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: Drained.

  1. kjlangton says:

    Love the last line in particular!

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  2. d3athlily says:

    Great final image to end a fantastic story.

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  4. Don’t we all feel like breaking all the rules sometimes!

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    • I believe we do! Hard couple of weeks… hell, challenging year+, and this story was just waiting for the right photo! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, and thanks for visiting Tales From the Motherland; it’s much appreciated!

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  5. Nice to see you back, if only briefly, Dawn!

    Maybe one of those curve balls will end up in your wheelhouse and you’ll knock the heck out of it.

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  6. wmqcolby says:

    “Broke all the rules at once”. Wow. Pretty much summed it up. Makes me wonder what’s next.

    Well, from one MIA to another, how have you been, Dawn? Good to see you!

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    • Kent, is great to see you; you really have been MIA! Or, so it seemed when I wasn’t. 😉 For all I know, you’ve been back and I’m the missing one! Good to see you as well. 😉 Things have been busier than I’d like (being home for more than 3 weeks would be a great start); I’ve had more challenges than feel manageable right now, and I have’t done much writing in the past month or so. I miss it! Really miss the FF community! Et tu?

      Thanks for stopping in to check on me, and for your kind feedback on my story!

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  7. OMG how I love this one!!! Although my house isn’t neat and tidy and clean very often, and there are times when I’ll leave the day’s dishes until the next day, the voices are there in the back of my head (I should do this, I should be that) far too often, nagging me. And yes, there have been a handful of times when I almost packed a bag and walked away.

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  8. Mike Lince says:

    With so many of your vignettes, I wonder what happens next – like the intro to a greater story. What I like about this story is that is no need for the next chapter. You somehow managed to say it all in 100 words.

    I should probably not continue to be amazed at your talent, but you somehow manage to keep right on amazing. Great post! – Mike

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  9. I love a rule breaker! Fantastic take on the prompt really enjoyed it, and to be honest…have days where I feel the same lol. Good luck Joy! 🙂

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  10. Mike says:

    NMS = Nothing missing here.

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  11. plaridel says:

    for once, she proved she wasn’t a robot. good for her.

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  12. Oh, breaking all the rules at once would be marvelous, wouldn’t it? Take care of yourself… Alicia

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  13. Amy Reese says:

    I love how you ended this. She broke all the rules at once. Sometimes that’s what must be done. If she did any other way, they probably wouldn’t notice or they would whine. Great story, Dawn. I hope you’ve been well. 🙂

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  14. Dear Dawn,

    I find myself cheering for Joy. Not much to say about this one other than Brava! Applause!

    I understand busy…it’s why the rerun this week. A few of my spinning plates have been wobbling off center a bit. It’s all good but seems to be snowballing. 😉

    I’m always happy to see you when you can join and miss you when you can’t. No guilt…just fact.

    Shalom, my friend.

    Rochelle

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    • Thanks so much Rochelle. Admittedly, there is more wobbling on my end, than I like. Some fairly huge family crises, as well as some sweet but busy things too… and I just haven’t been able to focus on my writing! But oh how i miss it! Thanks for the kind words of support; they mean the world. xox Shalom!

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  15. Sandra says:

    You simply can’t help but admire a woman like that. You drew her so convincingly well, Dawn. It’s always nice to see your name on the list, we miss you when you’re not around.

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  16. rgayer55 says:

    I’ve been disorderly and messy most of my life, so as not to set the bar too high. Who wants to say their greatest accomplishment in life was keeping a clean house?
    I hope she finds her new found freedom refreshing.

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  17. gahlearner says:

    Good for her! For a moment there I was afraid she’d completely wither away. Great story.

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  18. Margaret says:

    I wonder how long she’d been contemplating her big rebellion. I hope she’s happy now. Well portrayed.

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  19. How sad. The poor woman had never done much for herself. I hope her family woke up when they found her gone. What a rude shock that would be. It sounds like the children were much like their father. Well written as always, Dawn. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  20. Psychobabble says:

    It took a turn I wasn’t expecting. Hope everything’s good with you.

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  21. kathyd65 says:

    I really enjoyed your story.

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  22. Yeah, I know how she feels. Takes a lot of guts to do what she did, though I probably would have left a note!

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