Friday Fictioneers: Something Wicked This Way Comes


Another weekly photo prompt (this week by Mary Shipman), and we’re off! Friday Fictioneers is the most addictive Flash Fiction challenge around. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is our fearless leader. Check out her blog, Addicted to Purple to find more stories, and details on how to join us. A giant Mazel to Sandra Crook, whose stories continue to blow me away, and garner well-earned awards!

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Friday Fictioneers: Something Wicked This Way Comes…

“Stay alert, no chances–– This guy is capable of anything.” Detective Harley whispered, as he and three officers headed up the stairs.

Dust motes hung in rays of sun, filtering through the old wood siding. As floorboards creaked, the men paused, their tense breaths echoing in the stale silence.

A muffled groan pushed them back into action. Harley, taking two steps at a time, gun ready, burst into a room at the top.

“My God!” He reeled back, covering his mouth.

Several small bodies lay abandoned in a corner. Two women hung naked from dark rafters, one–– horrifyingly, alive.

(Word count: 99)

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58 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: Something Wicked This Way Comes

  1. Katalina4 says:

    Very True Detective….fun, in a dark kinda way 🙂

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  2. Cathy Ulrich says:

    Whoa, Dawn! Very dark with great imagery.

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  3. Carrie Rubin says:

    Oh wow, very dark. I think you captured the image perfectly, because it’s very creepy indeed.

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  4. Jan Brown says:

    Ooooh, a turn to the dark side. You are capable of many surprises!

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  5. mamaheidi60 says:

    Oh this one was great! Makes me wish there was a book to find out more! You are amazing!

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  6. Felicia Hf says:

    Whoa, very horrifying ending! Still a great story, and I’d love to know exactly what happened here!

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  7. Mike Lince says:

    Your imagery was great. I read crime stories all the time, and you scene could have fit into many of them. I wanted to keep on reading, but … – Mike

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  8. oldentimes says:

    Very dark and disturbing. The courses that the picture charts can be from anywhere.

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  9. Dear Dawn,

    Yikes. I had a hard time clicking like on this one. Not because it wasn’t well written as always, but because it was really horrifying.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  10. I think you take the prize for the darkest tale this week… I find it most disturbing actually that one was still alive (though I should rejoice)… the scene when they walk up the stairs you managed to capture the tension so well.

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  11. Mike says:

    A powerful piece of writing, Harley’s going to remember this case for a lifetime. Mike

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  12. Amy Reese says:

    Oh, what a horrifying image of the women hanging with one being alive and the abandoned bodies in the corner. I agree with Bjorn. You take the prize for the darkest this week. This image will stay with me for a while. Well done, Dawn.

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  14. liz young says:

    Not sure I shall sleep tonight, but well done!

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  15. wmqcolby says:

    Ohhhhh EWW!!! Excellent! Suspense and horror. Nice! It was one thing with hanging bodies, but one very much alive …??? YIKES! Packed a PUNCH!

    Incredible, Dawn! Five out of five nooses. 🙂

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  16. subroto says:

    Truly dark and horrifying. Nicely done.

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  17. Tight and tense.. and oh so good!

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  18. That is noir of the noirest kind! Well-told and chilling, but what a surprise!

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  19. plaridel says:

    i guess the guy wasn’t caught. if anything, they got in time to save one of the victims.

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  20. rgayer55 says:

    I agree with Perry about the noir. My mind saw this one in black & white.

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  21. Sandra says:

    That is just so graphic and horrific Dawn! You really took me by surprise there – a stunner!

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  22. IfeomaO says:

    Now that’s disturbing…horrifyingly alive could not be imagined. Great job.

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  23. gahlearner says:

    Oh, ouch, that really hit me in the gut and now I feel slightly nauseated. Great horror writing, I’m reeling here.

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  24. I agree, this is not your usual genre, Dawn. Disturbingly dark and powerful, but well written. —- Suzanne

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  25. Loved the tension that built to that ending. It was awesome. 🙂

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