Friday Fictioneers: Trust Me, Baby.


friday-fictioneersThis is a challenging week to write, but I was determined not to miss a single Friday Fictioneers. I’m on a boat off the coast of Central America– Belize. It could not be more beautiful, or peaceful. There is limited wifi, and I have not sought to use it until now. This morning, I had to check the day– it’s easy to lose track of time, when you’re snorkeling with nurse sharks, sea turtles and rays all day. And that, is truly all I’ve been doing. It’s magic!

However, it’s Wednesday and I didn’t want to miss Friday Fictioneers.  I love the wonderful writing community that our leader, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields provides; I make every effort not to miss it.  Nice new intro, Rochelle, reminding us all that we ARE a community and should make an effort to connect, and share. That said, I will need to do most of my reading when I get home… This is the first week, that I may not be able to do the reading I usually do.  I want my fellow FF to know that I try to read as many stories as possible each week; I believe in that mutual support. I, in turn, really appreciate all the time you share with me.  With each of my stories, kind or constructive feedback is always appreciated.

If you want to join in or read the other great stories, check out Rochelle’s blog, Addicted to Purple.  She spells it all out there. Kent Bonham provides our photo prompt this week.

©Kent Bonham

©Kent Bonham

(99 words)

Trust Me Baby

“Here this’ll help you chill.”

Neil handed the small pill to Andie, along with a shot of tequila.

“What is it?” She took a sip. “I don’t want to mess up my lines.”

He pushed a strand of hair behind her ear and leaned in closer.

“It’s your first love scene; this will just help you relax– help make it look real…” His finger traced her neck. “It could be real, baby… You know?”

I’m eighteen. “I know what I’m doing.”

She felt the pill slide down, with the strong liquid, as Neil slid his hand up her back.

“Action!”

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About Dawn Quyle Landau

Mother, Writer, treasure hunter, aging red head, and sushi lover. This is my view on life, "Straight up, with a twist––" because life is too short to be subtle! Featured blogger for Huffington Post, and followed on Twitter by LeBron James– for reasons beyond my comprehension.
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50 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: Trust Me, Baby.

  1. BELIZE! OH, I’m so jealous. I need some sun, some sand, some snorkeling (you can keep your nurse sharks, darling).

    Ominous tale – well written as usual. I think it may be better if she only THOUGHT the line about being eighteen — seems awkward to say aloud.

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  2. Wow- lucky you! Enjoy! Look forward to your posts and photos when you return.

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    • Such amazing sites, and things to enjoy, Lisa! It’s heaven. Cook left the hatch open yesterday, and I fell through the 12×18″ hole… breaking some ribs and some abdominal pain. Mostly, it feels good to float in the water and not much else though. A big bummer… but not a bad place to recover. 😉

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  3. Carrie Rubin says:

    Such a dedicated writer you are! Enjoy the rest of your vacation. Sounds wonderful!!

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  4. El Guapo says:

    Makes me hope the pill was a flintstones vitamin…

    Have a great cruise!

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  5. Once again a good story well done, Dawn. That’s terrible about your injury. It’s a good thing you’ve got the perfect place to heal. Enjoy the rest of that wonderful vacation. If you haven’t read my story yet, I said that I was late in answering some comments and didn’t read some of the stories because my computer was in the shop from last Fri. until today, Wed. It seems to be working well now.

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  6. I hope Neil isn’t some 63 year old slobbering pervert, that’s all I can say. Good story that conveys the danger more women face than we know. Belize sounds terrific, almost went there a couple years ago with my son but we went to Costa Rica instead.

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  7. Yik.. this gave me a creepy feeling of bad career choice… By the way I think you linked up last week’s story instead by accident.. happily I found my way correctly.

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  8. Hala J. says:

    Definitely feeling more than a little skeeved out here, which means your story did exactly what it set out to do!

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  10. Good yarn Dawn, its a tough life being an actor and sometimes you have to careful what they slip into your drink. Have a great holiday.

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  11. Enjoy you trip; we just got back from Belize and Honduras. But be careful: you’re in a high murder capitol of the world.

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  12. Action Indeed!!!!

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  13. Sandra says:

    A scene that gets played out more times than we’d care to contemplate. Nice one. BTW your link goes to last week’s story so you’re in for double hits this week from the more persistent readers. 🙂 Have a great time in Belize and take care.

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  14. Dear Dawn,

    At 18 she may think she knows what’s going on but methinks she’s about to get an unwelcome education. Well done. I appreciate your dedication/obsession. Nice to know I’m not the only one who writes and comments while on vacation.

    I hope that you’re feeling better with each day and still able to enjoy your scenic vacation of which I’m insanely jealous.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  15. I hope you’re witnessing some gorgeous sights and soaking up the sun! I really enjoyed this story. It was very eerie and made me quite uncomfortable. I wanted so badly to run in there and slap the guy. Ugh, I hope Neil gets what’s coming to him!

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  16. DCTdesigns says:

    Belize? Now I really think you should have taken me along. You’re story is eerily realistic says this thespian. But I do agree with Helena, have Andie think her age. Because as is so obvious she doesn’t have a clue what she is doing. “Trust me Baby” famous last words.

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  17. wmqcolby says:

    I’d like to read more about this 18 year-old and her co-star. Might be a few surprises there.
    You got it nailed.
    Belize will be inspiring. Happy writing about it!

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  18. etomczyk says:

    I’m sooooo jealous. I want to be there! And you’re a much better person than I am. If I were where you are now, I’d be sipping my alcoholic beverage and pretending I could no longer spell, let alone keep up my blog. Have a great time and have a drink on me.

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  19. K.Z. says:

    Dawn, I hope you’re having a wonderful time!
    your story made my hackles rise. i’d hate to be in her place. *shudder*

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  20. rgayer55 says:

    I think it’s unanimous, Neil’s intentions are designed to benefit her. Very well written and creative piece.
    Have a great time in Belize.

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  21. Adam Ickes says:

    Sounds like the vacation is going great. Lucky you!

    Good story, as usual. Not much I can say that hasn’t already been said.

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  22. unfetteredbs says:

    Little late here. Hope you’re on the mend. Good story…

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  23. EagleAye says:

    I don’t think I could ever trust anyone that says ‘trust me baby.’ Yuk! I can’t believe she took the pill. You really defined the characters sharply in this. I felt like the characters had depth.

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  24. Mike Lince says:

    I could say I envy your trip to Belize, but since the Med is only two blocks away I will hold back with that response.

    Your story was somewhere between funny and creepy. After it sunk in for a bit, I think it leaned toward the creepy side. You skillfully got the most out of 100 words, a talent I am getting accustomed to seeing from you. Looking forward to more soon. – Mike

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    • Thanks Mike… No doubt, you have little to be jealous of, as I perpetually envy your incredible lifestyle! That said, Belize is amazing, and by far one of the most beautiful places I’ve ever been!

      Creepy is what I was going for, so I’m glad I hit the mark with your discerning eye. Thanks, as always for taking the time. d

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  25. tedstrutz says:

    I’m wondering if this is acting experience is her first porn film. Is Neil the director or the star? I like stories that can go either way.

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