Friday Fictioneers: Requiem For the Sun (in honor of Earth Day 2015)


friday-fictioneersFriday Fictioneers is a weekly Flash Fiction challenge that features writers from all over the world. Use the photo prompt to write a 100-word story and join this group of Kool Kats, led by our talented and generous leader Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Check out her blog Addicted Purple, to read more stories, learn more, or join in. The photo this week was sent in by Douglas MacIlroy.

What a haunting image! While I think I know what it is, I’m taking a stab at Science Fiction in honor of Earth Day. I always appreciate honest, constructive feedback; please leave a comment.

© Douglas M. MacIlroy

© Douglas M. MacIlroy

Requiem For The Sun

“Do you ever dream of fresh strawberries, Da?”

“Don’t be silly, Ginny, we’ve got fresh berries whenever we want.”

“Not the ones that grew in fresh garden soil– you remember? The ones you and Ma grew … before the sun grew cold.”

Seamus gazed out the podhole at the icy land.

“No sense wishing for things we can’t have, luv. We’ve done fine with our “growing pods.” We have everything we had when the land was green: streams with fish, fruit trees… safety from the cold and ice.”

“Aye, Da, we’ve managed to recreate everything– but sun and fresh air.”

(100 words, exactly)

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GIPY

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Mother, Writer, treasure hunter, aging red head, and sushi lover. This is my view on life, "Straight up, with a twist––" because life is too short to be subtle! Featured blogger for Huffington Post, and followed on Twitter by LeBron James– for reasons beyond my comprehension.
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77 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: Requiem For the Sun (in honor of Earth Day 2015)

  1. storydivamg says:

    Interesting take on the earth’s future, Dawn. For the most part, I enjoyed the story. It’s true that there are some things well never be able to recreate. The last line seems just a little stilted for dialogue, but the sentiment and the warning are worth heeding.

    All my best,
    MG

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  2. Amy Reese says:

    Excellent, Dawn. It’s like our water problem. Some have plenty and others are praying for more. The problem is when the damage has been done and we are stuck like we are. Well done!

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  3. Danny James says:

    So sad! Climate warming will have dire consequences for us all.

    DJ

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  4. Jan Brown says:

    A good story for Earth Day. We need to cherish what we have.

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  5. wildbilbo says:

    An apocalyptic story – frequently some of my favourite types 🙂

    This is no exception, I enjoyed the very personal approach here. The revealing through dialogue works well.

    Cheers
    KT

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  6. micklively says:

    The image didn’t haunt me because I recognised it. Now I’ve seen all the divers and wonderful takes on it, I wonder whether that was a curse or a blessing?
    Good piece of scifi.

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  7. Sandra says:

    You’re early! I wasn’t expecting you until tomorrow. But a fine tale nevertheless.

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  8. Archon's Den says:

    A chilling, and possibly prophetic story. Well done.
    I’d try, “except sunshine and fresh air” in that last sentence – and we are “led by our”….etc. 🙂

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    • Thanks so much Archon, and glad to see you on Tales From the Motherland. I tried “except sunshine and fresh air,” but thought there were too many “s” sounds back to back. I don’t think it flows as nicely. I’m not sure where you are suggesting I put the “led by our?” I appreciate the suggestions.

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      • Archon's Den says:

        I’m sorry. I was commenting late at night, and time and intelligence were waning. In your prologue, above the actual story, you have “this group of Kool Kats, lead by our talented and generous leader Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.”
        lead (leed) present-tense verb – to conduct, to guide
        lead (led) noun – material bullets are made from
        led (led) past-tense of above verb
        I believe you intended to use the third word. These three are easy to mix up, and I’m a little (lot) OCD about homonyms. 🙄

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  9. Good story Dawn. What concerns me is that those who can afford it will have all those wonderful scientific benefits, while most of the poor will have struggled and died out. It’s like the movie “2012.” Well written as always. — Suzanne

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  10. subroto says:

    This is scarily believable because due to smog and pollution the future is out there already.

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  11. Karyn says:

    This is the first I’ve read here. It’s similar to mine…in a way.

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  12. ansumani says:

    Somethings can never be re-created. Good one.

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  13. BrainRants says:

    This is good SF. I like the elements of it introduced through the dialogue.

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  14. What a dull world that would be.

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  15. Mike Lince says:

    What worked for me in this passage was the combination of characters that revealed a little of both the optimistic and the pessimistic. Regardless of your word choices (referred to in previous comments), some of both the light side and the dark side were revealed. It makes good science fiction because you incorporated real science.

    It would be nice if it was also ‘real fiction,’ but alas, the story line seems all to real. Nice Earth Day tribute! – Mike

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  16. wmqcolby says:

    Sun and fresh air. Well, something to work on anyway. 😀 Nice story, Dawn! Always a pleasure reading your stuff.

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  17. yarnspinnerr says:

    So this sun did finally cooled and life continued. Great imagination.

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  18. Dear Dawn,

    Stepping out of your comfort zone shows your versatility and adventurous nature. Good job.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  19. Dee says:

    We do take so much for granted don’t we? Great story for Earth Day Dawn.

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  20. That last line is so foreboding. I have goosebumps!

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  21. Doug’s picture and your idea of “growing pods” brings this picture into an icy, unwelcome focus. Well done, Dawn!

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  22. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear Dawn, Yes, I would miss fresh air and the sunlight for sure. That is the stuff that depression is made of – not having a plentiful supply! Nan

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  23. rgayer55 says:

    You’ve painted a bleak picture, Dawn. I can see it well–too well for my liking.
    However, you did a fantastic job with the dialogue and weaving a strong story.

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  24. gahlearner says:

    Great story for Earth Day, sadly within the realm of possibility. We better watch out to keep our warm sunlight and fresh air. Even today, that’s not a given everywhere anymore.

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  25. Margaret says:

    Sunlight and fresh air are precious. Who knows what the future holds for our Earth, but I’d hate to lose these two things. Powerful story.

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  26. The best adaptation to a bad situation always, still, has a cost.
    Good tale. Randy

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  27. milliethom says:

    A very disturbing look into a possible future for the Earth. No sun or fresh air … and growing pots! What a terrible prospect. We certainly need to make drastic changes in order not to let things reach that state. A thought-provoking story, and so well written.

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  28. Very impressive Dawn – the perfect story for an eerie photo. Years ago (1972 to be exact) Bruce Dern starred in a movie called “Silent Running” which addressed this issue nicely – except he was in outer space. Here’s a link to the Youtube trailer:

    ~James

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  29. Oh I thought I had left a comment,.. The thought of life without soil and sun can not be compensated with any strawberries from pods.. A life like that seams dreadful.

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  30. Nice piece of SF, bleak future softened by that lovely dialog.

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  31. Laurel Leigh says:

    The line “before the sun grew cold” is rather haunting. I’m impressed anytime someone writes flash fiction. It’s really tough to pull off these short pieces and this one delivers a strong message while still entertaining. Nicely done!

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