Friday Fictioneers: There But For the Grace…


Life has been a swirl of amazing travel and incredible moments these past 6 weeks. I’ve missed my Fictioneers group, but have been swallowed up in hours of holding and loving my new grandson, Amitai Shelev (mommy minus the m + tie). He is amazing and my heart is filled with him… and the heaviness of leaving him, in just a few days. I can’t share photos, but check out my Tales From the Motherland FB page (nudge nudge- hit Like while you’re there, for good luck) and this post, for more.

Friday Fictioneers is a weekly flash fiction challenge, lead by our fearless leader, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields at Addicted to Purple. Writers from all over the world add their 100 words. Visit her blog for more details. I recognize the wall, in this photo… I’m pretty sure it’s in (or was) Vancouver, BC, near where I live. If not, somewhere close; I’ve seen it. I felt a jolt of sadness in seeing the photo prompt this week; it made me think about the loss of things that are precious. As always, honest, constructive feedback is always welcome.

© C.E. Ayr

© C.E. Ayr

There But For the Grace

“Don’t stare, love; let’s go.” Maria pulled her daughter’s hand, but the child stood firm. “Come, the market will close soon and we won’t have food for the week.”

“Mama, why are they taking it down? How will we remember?”

“Lower your voice; we shouldn’t speak about these things.”

Shelley’s large brown eyes watched the bulldozer as the beautiful murals crumbled.

“But mama, we will have nothing left! Why?”
“There are no more creatures in the seas; the wall is a hard reminder of what the Ministry has done.” Her mother leaned close and whispered. “Come, the market is closing.”

(100 words, exactly)

*    *     *

GIPYHelp Me Reach My Goals! I’d love to see the Tales From the Motherland Facebook page reach 800 likes in 2015. Have you stopped by to spread some fairy dust? Follow me on Twitter, LeBron James does! Most importantly, if you like a post I’ve written, hit Like and leave a comment. I love to hear what readers think. Honest, positive or constructive feedback is always welcome. Click Follow; you’ll get each new post delivered by email,  no spam.  ©2015  Please note, that all content and images on this site are copyrighted to Dawn Quyle Landau and Tales From the Motherland, unless specifically noted otherwise. If you want to share my work, please give proper credit. Plagiarism sucks.

About Dawn Quyle Landau

Mother, Writer, treasure hunter, aging red head, and sushi lover. This is my view on life, "Straight up, with a twist––" because life is too short to be subtle! Featured blogger for Huffington Post, and followed on Twitter by LeBron James– for reasons beyond my comprehension.
Aside | This entry was posted in Honest observations on many things and tagged , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink.

55 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: There But For the Grace…

  1. Pingback: Friday Fictioneers: There But For the Grace… | shyamis

  2. Shalom, Dawn! I don’t know why I didn’t think of it before, but just today I shared your blog with my Mom. I know she’s gonna love it. Her name is Sharon so if you see that handle in the comments, it may be her. You and Mom share some very similar qualities – your unconditional love for your children and a deep compassion for others. That’s high praise, Dawn – I have *that* much respect and admiration for you. Stay safe and God bless you and your family.

    Like

  3. Cathy Ulrich says:

    This reminds of me of a short story that I wrote in honors English in high school. It was entitled “The Rabbit,” and it was about memories of a strange creature that went extinct. This is so well told in so few words, Dawn.

    Liked by 1 person

  4. Mike Lince says:

    At last you can relate to the special kind of love that is reserved especially for the grandchild. As you have discovered, it is wonderful. And Baby Amitai is so fortunate to have you as his loving grandmother! He could not be greater blessed upon his entry to the world.

    Welcome back to Friday Fictioneers. I see you wasted no time applying your fruitful imagination to come up with this sinister story line. While Amitai enjoys the gift of a grandmother’s love, we, your followers, continue to enjoy the fruits of your clever writing. I, as one of your many fans, look forward to more story snapshots like this one. Keep them coming. – Mike

    Like

    • Mike, as usual, you were right… I am utterly smitten! So true, this grandparent love is just fabulous! You are in my mind, as I have already imagined reading stories to him via Skype! An idea I will steal from my travel buddy! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment; your feedback always makes me smile. 😀

      Like

  5. Oooo. Great twist at the end!

    Like

  6. momshieb says:

    Ah, beautiful and concise. It made me so sad (which is good!)

    Like

  7. jgroeber says:

    In the midst of reading The Unwanteds with my oldest (after The Giver and The City of Ember series) and I’m totally with you on this one. Well played!

    Like

  8. Congratulations on the birth of your new grandson! Your gives such a frightening thought! Dead oceans. Great story!

    Like

  9. I so often fear this is the way our world is heading. All God’s beautiful creatures in museums, zoos and painted on the sides of building. Well done.

    Liked by 1 person

  10. Dale says:

    A sad tale indeed.. (But mazel tov on the new grand-baby!)

    Like

  11. rgayer55 says:

    We lose species to extinction every year and are killing our oceans. Very sad and real.

    On a happy note, congrats on the new Grandbaby. They are fun. 🙂

    Like

    • Yes they are Russell. I could bury my nose in his sweet little neck all day. Hopefully that sounds as cute as it is.

      And the world is headed in a scary direction indeed. Wish it was more fiction than it is.

      Like

  12. ceayr says:

    Powerful words, Dawn, great story.
    And Vancouver BC, as seen from Granville Street Bridge.
    The building is now gone.

    Like

  13. Jan Brown says:

    The world you describe may be reality sooner than we think, if we continue to overfish, pollute and dump our trash into the ocean. Very sad. But a wonderful, well written story!

    Like

  14. Amy Reese says:

    A loss of the things that are precious…an excellent take, Dawn. There are so many things that we’re losing and we’re not even aware of it. I just heard a story about how the drought out here is affecting animals and fish. Many are going extinct. It would be sad to see this crumble. It’s so beautiful. Well done, Dawn.

    Liked by 1 person

  15. storydivamg says:

    Great work, Dawn! Becoming a grandmother (along with all your recent travels), must be inspiring you.

    All my best,
    MG

    Liked by 1 person

  16. tedstrutz says:

    Chilling ending… nice.

    Liked by 1 person

  17. Sandra says:

    More than a hint of reality in this Dawn, well done. And congratulations!

    Like

  18. Good story as always, Dawn. I hope we never have to say what that mother does. Great ending twist. Well written. —— Suzanne

    Liked by 1 person

  19. Dear Dawn,

    A sad commentary well written. More than that was the over all tension. I could feel the mother’s apprehension as she tried to silence her daughter while looking over her shoulder.

    Mazel tov on Amitai. Beautiful beautiful boy.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Liked by 1 person

    • Thanks so much Rochelle, that is exactly the image I wanted to paint. I’m glad it came through.

      I would have loved to have shared a picture with the group, but alas… of course, if they visit the FB page… it’s a tricky thing. 😉

      Like

  20. So sad. Another blessing to count today.

    Liked by 1 person

  21. gahlearner says:

    This is such a sad and great story, in so many ways. Bad enough that life in the sea has vanished, worse that humans are at fault, and to top it all off, history is rewritten (as always) and what is not allowed to be remembered doesn’t exist.
    May your grandson experience a better world! Congrats!

    Like

  22. Nicely done with an effective twist at the end. Damn that Ministry! Bet it’s all made up of Republicans.

    Liked by 1 person

  23. Dawn, congratulations on your new grandson! That’s wonderful. I hope your story never comes true. Scary stuff.

    Like

  24. wildbilbo says:

    Great dialogue here and a strong theme. Destroying reminders, probably to minimise dissent.
    Well done.

    Like

  25. karenboddey says:

    I love writing short fiction. Perhaps I’ll join in next time.

    Like

    • Karen, welcome to Tales From the Motherland and this week’s Friday Fictioneers. I hope you’ll take a peak at other posts and come back! 🙂 If you enjoy short fiction, you should definitely give FF a try. It’s a very supportive group!

      Like

  26. Somehow, denial is like killing all the animals a second time. The hiding your head in the sand is all to common…

    Liked by 1 person

PLEASE LEAVE A COMMENT; I'M LISTENING.

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s