Friday Fictioneers: Jesus Saves


Friday Fictioneers is a magical place, where writers spin stories from a photo. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields manages to keep us in line and provide inspiration each week, as our talented leader. Visit her blog Addicted To Purple to read more stories, or join in. This week’s photo comes from “The Reclining Gentleman.”

© The Reclining Gentleman

© The Reclining Gentleman

Jesus Saves

“Don’t worry, baby, everything’s ok.”

The dusky night whizzes by his speeding car.

“There’s evil in this world… but the Lord guides me.”

He glances at her sleepy face in the mirror and smiles.

“No more tears.”

He pulls the car over to the center of the bridge, opens the car door and unbuckles the car seat. His four year-old daughter wraps her tiny arms around his neck.

“You’re safe, baby. Jesus saves.”

He kisses her silky cheek and drops her over the railing, into the frigid water ninety feet below, then turns back around–– a deer in the headlights.

(100 words, exactly)  Most days the news is too much to bear. Some days, a photo reminds me of that. As always, I welcome your honest, constructive feedback. Please leave a comment.

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Mother, Writer, treasure hunter, aging red head, and sushi lover. This is my view on life, "Straight up, with a twist––" because life is too short to be subtle! Featured blogger for Huffington Post, and followed on Twitter by LeBron James– for reasons beyond my comprehension.
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63 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: Jesus Saves

  1. Carrie Rubin says:

    Oh man, that’s a shocker and a heart-stopper, Dawn. You definitely create a visceral reaction with this one. And in 100 words or less, that’s not easy to do.

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  2. Amy Reese says:

    Oh, so sad. Definitely a shocking ending. I was hoping this wouldn’t happen. You always wonder what happens in the moment when someone commits a horrible act such as this. Well done, Dawn.

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  3. I feared he was going to kill the little girl and he DID. There’s a special place for people like that and it “ain’t” very nice. Well done, Dawn.

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  4. Honie Briggs says:

    Nothing will ever shock me again, I thought. That is until your story hit me right between the eyes. The title should have been a clue that there was an upper cut on the way. Bravo, Dawn.

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  5. jgroeber says:

    I’m with mariner2mother. You nailed it.
    (Living in Massachusetts, with a view of Plum Island every time we head to the beach, this hits especially close to home. Our news every night for the last week has pretty much been about the guy in your story. Can you imagine? Like for real?)

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    • I’m really honored that this story nails it, for you and others. I write to impact and it’s great to do that, with people I respect.

      Totally unsure what you’re referring to. Send me a link; now I’m curious… though one dark story certainly begets another. Did you hit the link at the end of this one? Just jolted me.

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  7. Margaret says:

    Tragic ending, and the more so because of the real life story you’ve linked in. You’ve captured the twisted mindset of the father very well.

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  8. klm says:

    I’m sorry you linked this with Jesus, (especially in the title) who provides so much hope and so much guidance to do the right thing. It’s compelling, and you are a talented writer, with deep thought.. but I was sad at where this led me, and it was only partly about the horrific act.

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    • Klm, thanks for sharing your thoughts; I appreciate your perspective. I feel strongly that the title reflects the horror of what has been done in the name of Jesus (read the link) and the insanity of that. I respect your concern; I appreciate your feedback, but I stand by the choice. Thanks for taking the time to visit Tales From the Motherland to read and share your thoughts; it is much appreciated.

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  9. It’s a sad iterpretation of accounts heard about too often. A father with a psychotic mind.
    You’ve told the horror story with compassion.
    Isadora 😎

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  10. What an awful thing! I thought they were both going to go over the side so the ending shocked me even more. Very well told.

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  11. plaridel says:

    what a twist. i didn’t expect the tragic ending.

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  12. micklively says:

    A seriously misguided Christian or Christian for short.

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  13. So tragic, Dawn. That happens so often here. People are deep in depression and just give up. It’s doubly terrible when they take their children with them. Well written as always. —— Suzanne

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  14. Sandra says:

    OMG I wasn’t expecting that, Dawn. Stopped me in my tracks that did. Well done.

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  15. Dear Dawn,

    Your story is enough to turn my stomach and break my heart. You made the horrible news up close and personal. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  16. rgayer55 says:

    Why people drag Jesus into their crimes never ceases to amaze me. I suppose invoking his name creates instant justification in their sick, twisted mind. Rarely a week goes by when I don’t read about someone who killed their children. It makes me want to barf.

    A well written piece on an unsettling subject.

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    • It is incredibly sad and shocking, how many mentally ill people are out there… too many of them with children. And yes, Russell, horrible that somehow it’s so often “Jesus” who talks to them. Sad, sad, sad.

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  17. Oh Dawn, you sucker-punched me with this one. Heartbreaking and to read about the RL case, I am speechless. It takes courage to write about something like this, but it needs to be done. Thank you so much, that little girl deserved to be remembered through your words.

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  18. So sad.. I just hope there is a place for the man where he can cause no more harm.. sick but so well written

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  19. It is interesting how people suddenly start believing in Jesus when it’s time to do something hideous, he suddenly becomes an inspiration. It’s starting to sound like a well rehearsed alibi to me. Good story.

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  20. Such a misguided man and deeply troubled I feel. I didn’t get the deer in the headlights part but otherwise I thought your story hit you in the gut . Well done.

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  21. Nan Falkner says:

    Jesus is really not talking to them – the Devil is and they fall for it every time. Poor child with a bad non-care giver. Bless her/his heart. Nan

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  22. jwdwrites says:

    Wow, that shocked. Very dark, but good.

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