Friday Fictioneers: I Got You Babe


I’m late, late, late this week… I’ve been in Denver for parent’s weekend at my son’s school. Such fun times together, but no time for anything else. Humble apologies for late submission and tardiness in reading all of your great stories!

A warning, this photo has a very disquieting quality to it, that pulled me in a dark direction. The focus on the closest cars, while the others are distorted and blurred, the rain. It give me the creeps. I apologize in advance for the language and unsettling topic. A writer’s gotta’ write what the muse inspires.

Friday Fictioneers is a weekly flash fiction challenge with a photo prompt. Use it to create a 100-word story. If you are interested in joining this merry band of writers, from all over the world, check out Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s blog Addicted to Purple. As Always, I welcome honest, constructive feedback; please leave a comment.

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

© Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

I Got You Babe

Stupid bitch. As if a little rain would stop me? Park under a light and wait it out? I’m far more patient than you know.

I’ll wait in the shadows, baby doll–– with those pretty eyes watching for a break in the rain. Nervous? Afraid you’ll get wet, but more afraid of the dark… You should be.

You don’t even notice me. You’re all the same.

I can smell your fear, taste it–– sweet and salty, like the last one’s… and the one before her.

Sit and wait. I’ve got time.

I love the rain; it washes away the evidence.

(word count: 100)

*   *   *

GIPYHelp Me Reach My Goals!   KAPOW!  The Tales From the Motherland Facebook page recently hit the 2015 goal of 800 likes (which I set after hitting the 700 mark)! I’m going big for the next year and aiming for 1,000!! Have you stopped by to spread some fairy dust? Follow me on Twitter, LeBron James does (yes, for real)! Most importantly, if you like a post I’ve written, hit Like and leave a comment. Honest, constructive feedback is always appreciated. Click Follow; you’ll get each new post delivered by email,  no spam.  ©2015  Please note, that all content and images on this site are copyrighted to Dawn Quyle Landau and Tales From the Motherland, unless specifically noted otherwise. If you want to share my work, I’m grateful, but please give proper credit; plagiarism sucks!

About Dawn Quyle Landau

Mother, Writer, treasure hunter, aging red head, and sushi lover. This is my view on life, "Straight up, with a twist––" because life is too short to be subtle! Featured blogger for Huffington Post, and followed on Twitter by LeBron James– for reasons beyond my comprehension.
Aside | This entry was posted in Honest observations on many things and tagged , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink.

22 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: I Got You Babe

  1. Dee says:

    Absolutely gave me the creeps. Well written as always, and just love your last line. Excellent Dawn.

    Liked by 1 person

  2. That’s a real serial killer, Dawn. This sounds like the hook for a crime thriller. It’s a little diferent than your usual story, but well written , spooky. O_o — Suzanne

    Like

  3. Pingback: Friday Fictioneers: I Got You Babe | ugiridharaprasad

  4. Thanks Suzanne. While this a departure from my usual, it’s fun to try new things. Glad it spooked you; that was my intent. 😉

    Like

  5. Dear Dawn,

    Dark, haunting, disturbing and very well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Liked by 1 person

  6. Amy Reese says:

    Chilling, Dawn. That last line really seals in the coldness and darkness of this. Well done.

    Like

  7. iamehsan69 says:

    The picture of the story is really clear! Glad i got to read this stuff.

    Like

  8. HonieBriggs says:

    Dawn,
    You tapped right into the mind of a predator this week. It is hard to shake the dark muse. The prompt does bring the creepy. Well done.

    Like

  9. Dale says:

    Am I ever glad I decided to go see if there were any more submissions!
    Great job, Dawn… so cold and creepy!

    Liked by 1 person

  10. Well, dear, you certainly did go a bit on the dark side this week. And did a darn fine job of it, too. baby doll ~ somehow this is the creepiest line of all (for me).

    Liked by 1 person

  11. Mike Lince says:

    I love it! Turning to the dark side, just in time for Halloween. This post is like so many scary movies that are popular at this time of year, it’s like taking the Trick part of Trick or Treat to the ultimate level. – Mike

    Liked by 1 person

PLEASE LEAVE A COMMENT; I'M LISTENING.

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s