Friday Fictioneers: Caught In Your Web Of Lies


Three steps forward, two back still equals forward! But still not writing as much as I’d like. Thanks for always showing up, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields! This week’s photo is provided by  Ronda Del Boccio. Honest, constructive feedback is always welcome.

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Caught In Your Web of Lies

Last night was amazing! You sure know how to make me feel special, babe. Your body’s so hot! Baby, I’ve been thinking about you all day––

Alice re-read the last two lines of the email and slammed the laptop shut. Her eyes burned with tears as she glanced at the photos along the mantel, then ran to the bathroom to vomit.

Two hours later she opened the computer again.

John, I’ve taken what I need from our bank account. Call your baby. I’m through.

Alice hit send, and left her home for good.

(Word count: 92)

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56 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: Caught In Your Web Of Lies

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    Decisive action, and probably what he deserves!

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  2. Dear Dawn,

    I can’t help thinking of Waiting to Exhale where she burned his belongings in the driveway. Too good for the jerk. What an email to find. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. Sandra says:

    I didn’t get it on the first read, but the second was quite stunning. Imagine finding out in such a way. Difficult to get your head around. Well done, Dawn.

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    • Thanks Sandra. I appreciate the feedback. I’m wondering what was missing, that you didn’t get it? Do you have a suggestion for tightening it up? I’d love to hear your thoughts.

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      • Sandra says:

        It was just that I read the opening email as being addressed to her. And he sounded so lascivious that I couldn’t blame her for being disappointed about his tone. My problem entirely.

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        • Not really… this is good feedback, as any reader might not get that they are dropping in on a scene. There are small tweaks that might improve that. I like to know what doesn’t work, to improve overall. Thanks Sandra!

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  4. Sandra says:

    Did my comment disappear? I’ll pop back later to check.

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  5. ceayr says:

    Yegads!
    Hubby is a bit of a numpty, and not in a nice way.

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  6. gahlearner says:

    What an idiot, he deserves what he gets. I wonder how long Baby will stick around when she finds out that all the money is gone (I hope).

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  7. granonine says:

    Stupid man. His new “baby” needs to remember that he who cheats WITH you will cheat ON you.

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  8. Dale says:

    He and his baby deserve each other,
    Kudos to the wife for not accepting it – nor giving him the opportunity to try to bullshit his way out of it!

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  9. thecentristadventist says:

    He got what he deserves
    Good on her

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  10. thecentristadventist says:

    He got what he deserved
    Baby will soon realize i hope that if he cheats with you he will likely cheat on you

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  11. Sabio Lantz says:

    Ouch — had that happen to me once. Hit home. Well done

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  12. 4963andypop says:

    Im glad he got his come-uppance. Not very tech savvy to leave such messages just lying around…

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  13. Abhijit Ray says:

    What made Alice do what she did? Why did she leave John with his money?

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  14. subroto says:

    With no money left the baby won’t be staying for much longer. John is in for a dosage of karma. Nice one.

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  15. msjadeli says:

    He’s blessed that’s all you did!

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  16. Violet Lentz says:

    My bet is, he used the exact same lines on her.. Nicely told!

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  17. What a horrible way to find out but glad she took what she needed and simply left. I don’t think I would have been so gracious. Great write!

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  18. Margaret says:

    Poor Alice. I like how you told the story with the two emails interspersed with the narrative. A very dramatic story.

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  19. Decision! Laptops certainly play a part in the drama of our lives.

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  20. Phew…I know that feeling all too well! Good for her…thinking with her head instead of her heart.

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  21. Interesting short. Would like to see more of the story!

    Keep writing my friend

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