As so many of you have noted, it’s such a wonderful surprise to wake up and see your own photo on the Friday Fictioneer’s page. This morning when I saw this photo, I thought: “Wow, I wonder who else went there?” Duh. It took me a minute to check the © name. It’s also true that writing a story for a photo that you know is a different challenge all together. I’ll be curious to see what you all come up with! I’m heading to Southern CA today, so if I’m slow making the rounds, please know that it isn’t for lack of interest!
Friday Fictioneers is a weekly, photo promped flash fiction challenge. Members are encouraged to write a 100-word story, with a beginning, middle and end. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is our maestro, coordinating this ever-growing community of writers. It is the one thing I do consistently each week, for the sheer joy of it. September 8th marked my 1-year anniversary of joining the Fictioneers, and I haven’t missed a week yet! Woot woot!
If you’d like to join us or check out the other stories, visit Rochelle’s blog Addicted to Purple for more details. I always welcome constructive, thoughtful feedback; please leave a comment.
Abuela Works (100 words)
Abuela stirs the briny water day in and day out. Six days a week she climbs the steep trail to the salt mines; Sunday she walks to church. In cold mornings she dons her red gloves and sturdy hat, to protect her from the burning minerals and the brutal sun. Her eyes have grown milky from the glare; her skin is dry and cracked.
Do the touristas taste her tears in the salt they buy?
As I walk to my dusty school, I promise God that I will go to college and make Abuela proud. I will ease her burdens.
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Beautiful story and seeming so authentic for this wondrous photo. I haven’t a clue what I will write. Congrats on your Fictioneers Anniversary! Woot woot!
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Thanks Amy… of course, it’s easier for me, as I know some details. 😉 Thanks for the anniversary love; I owe it all to YOU! Thanks so much for dragging me over here; it’s something I look forward to every week! xo
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Wow…… i like the article. It just brought some cool memories from the past
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Thank you Lorenz. I hope the memories are good? I have enjoyed some of your posts on Kenya. Welcome to Tales From the Motherland!
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I too saw a grandmother. Unfortunately my ignorance of the photo makes my story quite different.I am glad however to have learned something new. Thanks for sharing the picture and your story.
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Ignorance is bliss when it comes to FF, Dawn. I think that’s the magic of Fictioneers! We each bring what we see to the photo. I was going to go in a different direction– take it away from the truth, but this woman’s life needed to be imagined. It was in an incredible place to visit and see, but watching the workers was personally challenging. Thanks for your feedback!
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Did you blog about it elsewhere?
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I did several posts on our trip to Peru. It was a series that included our hike to Machu Picchu and a week in the Amazon. You can find them in June/July of 2012 of my archives. Some pretty amazing stuff! 😉
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I love your heartfelt story, Dawn.
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Thanks Gina! I really appreciate your feedback.
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You’re welcome. I hope you enjoy your travels and visits.
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On my way to San Diego today… no one to visit, but it will be fun to be on the beach! Thanks. 🙂
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San Diego is beautiful this time of year. 🙂
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🙂
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Great story and fab pic 🙂
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Thanks Helen. It was an incredible place to visit. 🙂
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A true story of love, Dawn. I’m out of town shortly through the weekend, but not quite as far as you’re going. Safe travels. I enjoyed the photo so much that I have another story with it tomorrow (but not linked, as I don’t like to do two when there are so many to read.)
janet
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I’ll have to check that out. I’m traveling today, so haven’t gotten to too many yet! I loved Peru… so many amazing images.
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Dawn, What a lovely story. I wondered what that photo was about. It took me a while to think of a story for it. Well written as always. Have a good trip. 🙂 —Susan
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Thanks Susan. There’s a lot to this story… my first draft was 155 words! Oh my. I had to cut, cut, cut! I’ll get to more stories when I’m out of the airport! 😉
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Well, your story more than lived up to the photo’s promise, Dawn. I am left feeling a little guilty (a photo-tourista), a lot heart-wrenched by the glimpse of Abuela and the narrator, who in my head is a granddaughter. Beautiful.
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It was a humbling trip all around! One day we stopped to pick up two women with their young daughters, racing along a dusty road. They spoke no English; my spanish is poor at best. Luckily my daughter’s is a little better. They explained that they were racing to work and to school– they were SO grateful for a ride, and from a tourista no less! The school was 6 miles down the road!! Humbling indeed, Jen. Thanks for your kind words and for stopping by!
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I will ease her burdens. What a selfless thought and wonderful promise. Congrats on your anniversary and most of all THANKS for introducing me to FF. If it weren’t for you, I’d never have had this addiction. Alicia
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Hopefully the addiction continues to feed you! It’s good to be responsible for positive things… 😉 Thanks Alicia!
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I love that this pic gave me inspiration immediately! Great take 🙂
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Thanks! I’m so excited to read all the stories… later today and tomorrow. I’m glad this was inspiring!
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Nicely done.
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Thanks! I appreciate that. 🙂
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Is that what the wicked looking club is for? To stir the brine? It almost looks like she is waiting to see the head of some varmint pop up out of the ground to give it a good whack!
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Actually, This was taken in the salt mines of Peru. No doubt, this woman worked very hard, and had little fiction in her life. But it makes for a good promo, it seems.
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Lovely story, Dawn, to go with a truly stunning photograph. So much atmosphere in this photo.
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Thanks so much Sandra. It was a stunning place, and so many beautiful photos from that trip. This woman, and the others working there, really touched me.
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Hope she can do it. So much temptation out there.
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Indeed. Interestingly, I imagined my narrator a boy… but a few people have thought he was a she. Thanks for the feedback, Patrick!
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Beautiful story, Dawn. A whole way of life and the hopes of a new generation captured through the narrator’s view of her Abuela
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Thanks Siobhan. I wanted the perspective to be very personal… though my narrator was a boy, in my mind. A girl’s voice clearly came through, as so many have thought it was a she! 😉 I love that about FF. We each see something unique in the photo, and in the stories told!
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I just had to go back and read it again, seeing the narrator as a boy – it makes perfect sense, and has an assured determination that I hope will carry him through whatever challenges life puts in his way
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Ahh, that is so thoughtful of you, reading it a 2nd time; thank you! I’m glad it works either way… 🙂
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It must be such a hard life, which you’ve captured beautifully (and from reading various stories for this prompt I finally know what the photo is all about!).
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A hard life indeed. These plots have been maintained since the Inca nation farmed them; it’s incredible! I’m so glad you enjoyed it.
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Dear Dawn,
Your narrator is a thoughtful and loving granddaughter. I’m sure her hardworking grandmother is already proud of her. Beautifully written with sensitivity and understanding. As you’ve generously commented on mine, I’ve never been disappointed when I come here. Thank you for the wonderful photo. We benefit from your travels and your writing.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle, such kind and thoughtful feedback! I’m glad my photo has provoked such diverse and interesting stories. As I’ve mentioned, it’s interesting to me that almost every reader thought my narrator was a girl. I’ve read and re-read and can only guess that it’s the level of sensitivity they demonstrate? When I wrote it, I envisioned a young boy… not that this detail matters so much, but I find the entire process so interesting– what we each see in the photo, and in the stories we read! Thanks again for your kind feedback; it is so appreciated! Shalom, Dawn
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Dear Dawn,
Thank you for the thought provoking prompt photo. Your story more than did it justice. I used to unload 100lb. bags of salt from trucks and it is the hardest substance to handle. After a while my hands would crack and bleed. Great story that captures the toil of a lifetime and the hope and resolution of youth.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thanks so much Doug. Having explored the mines, I was struck by how hard the work must be– day in and day out, over many years. The sun, the salt– dry, burning and yes, hard to gather and load. It was humbling beyond humbling to see! I’m happy my photo inspired so many wonderful stories. Mahalo, for your wonderful feedback and the time you took here.
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The imagery here is explicit and real. I enjoyed reading both stories 🙂
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Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it. “Both?” I only wrote one. Thanks for stopping by Tales From the Motherland; I appreciate your time.
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Oh my. I read your post on Dawn Q. Landau or is my imagination running away with me? lol
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I’m probably confused. I wrote one for the Fictioneers, but wrote another today… a 10 minute writing blitz. I AM Dawn Q. Landau. 😉
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Just beautiful, the photo and the story.
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Thanks Jen. It was a very powerful place to visit – very humbling! I’m glad you liked it.
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Do the touristas taste her tears in the salt they buy?—-I love this line. Says so much, can be applied to many other facets in our lives.
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No. Doubt.
I’m glad that you like it Audra. You certainly know beautiful lines!
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Beautiful story, so many lovely lines, and thank you for the photo. You have inspired so many writers!
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Thanks Love Happy Notes, and welcome to Tales From the Motherland! I’m so glad the photo has inspired so many wonderful stories. It’s the magic of Friday Fictioneers: each week, another photo/ another writer, inspires us all! I appreciate you taking the time to stop by and share your thoughts!
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what an interesting story. I’m assuming this is the factual representation of the prompt. Anyway, good job Dawn
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Thanks! I’m glad you liked it, and I appreciate you taking the time to stop by Tales From the Motherland to read and comment. I don’t know the exact details of this woman’s life, but the work looked hard at the salt mines in Maras, Peru. The locals have harvested salt this way since the Inca nation began the mines. It’s an incredible site to see! Again, thanks for taking the time. 🙂
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I had a guess at Peru in my story. Funny that!
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Nice piece. I liked the: Her eyes have grown milky from the glare.
Also, the imparted sense of future hope from the granddaughter. Randy
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Thanks Randy; I’m glad that you enjoyed it, and I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. It’s always great to get feedback– positive or instructive, it helps my writing!
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Congrats on having your photo chosen! And then to add such a beautiful story to the mix! I agree with amac – I loved the line “Do the touristas taste her tears in the salt they buy?
Well done.
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Thanks Tiffany! It was a wonderful surprise to see one of my photos included. This is a good one, and I’ve been loving the stories it’s inspired! Thanks for the feedback.
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You’re welcome! I’ll bet it is – and so cool to see so many different stories come from one photo. 🙂
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Yes! I love that about FF each week, but admittedly, it’s a bit more interesting when it’s your photo. 😉
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I completely agree! 🙂
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I hope she gets a good price from the tourists.
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One has to wonder if the price is ever worth the effort expended! Thanks for stopping by Alice. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. 🙂
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A very thought provoking story, Dawn. It touched me on many levels. I especially enjoyed the promise of hope at the end. Wishing you safe travels.
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Thanks Russell. It honored that it touched you. I wanted there to be some hope. The people who work those mines must hope for more…
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I decided to go in a completely different way then my normal. But I enjoyed your story. I do hope that her work will be for the good in the end. It’s hard work for sure.
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I hope so too, Jackie! I’m working my way through the stories… look forward to reading yours! Thanks for taking the time. 🙂
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hi Dawn. thanks for sharing this gorgeous photo… and your story was moving, beautiful and very real.
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Thanks KZ; I’m so glad you liked them both. 🙂
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Dawn, thank you for the beautiful photo.. it’s one of my favorite of all times in FF.. and for an anniversary what could be better. The story really showed the difference between those born with a silver spoon in their mouth, and those who understands the struggle that lies behind it all.
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Wow! That is true compliment, Björn! There have been so many great photos; I’m sincerely honored. It was such a special place and the people working there really touched me. There were other stories I could write, but when I thought of the tears mixing with salt… this story was the one. Thanks for your wonderful words; I will smile all day. 😀
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Quite nice from the first presentation of Abuela to the surprisinsg switch towards the end to the sense of long and difficult achievement that hopefully is about to follow. But will Abuela be there to appreciate and experience it? Could be the opening of a novel or the first of many stories. Thanks, Dawn!
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I really appreciate that Perry! Such a thoughtful comment, and an interesting idea for sure. IF I had the time and patience! Thank you for taking the time to read and share your generous thoughts.
And that new photo– Wow! I love it!
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Dear Dawn – great story and very neat picture! Don’t know what it is – a mystery probably very obvious – but not to me. I always thought there was a story behind the girl on the salt shaker box for Mortons carrying an umbrella, and the salt pouring out. What a magnificent sentence you penned “Do the touristas taste her tears in the salt they buy?” Such a beautiful saying – incredible Dawn! Just Marvelous! Nan 🙂
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Thanks Nan; you are always so kind in your comments! I appreciate it. There is no mystery, my story IS what the photo is. This was taken at the salt mines at Maras, Peru. If you Google that, Wikipedia has a pretty good description, but my story tells the basics. I’m glad you liked both. 😉
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Wow! That has some bigger story there, maybe a novel, you think … ? Intriguing and a just good read! Great, Dawn!
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Thanks Kent! I’m sure there’s a bigger story there, but for now… it will have to stay flash fiction. I’m so glad you enjoyed it though. 🙂
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