Friday Fictioneers: From The Inside Out


The week started on a sad note, with the death of David Bowie. It has washed over me over and over, since hearing the news–– moments after his family announced it. The world is an infinitely more interesting place because David Bowie  was in it. Music, art, diversity–– life, has lost a truly great talent. If you haven’t seen is video Lazarus, which was intentionally released just days before his death, it’s amazing! The man made artistic expression of his own death!

Thanks to Amy Reese for this week’s evocative photo! I can imagine there will be so many interesting stories. If you would like to read more stories or contribute, please check out Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ blog, Addicted to Purple. She is the magician who keeps all the balls in the air! As always, I welcome honest, constructive feedback.

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From The Inside Out

As we walk back through the empty streets, I hold your hand. Its firm warmth is as predictable to me as the intake of breath. Our steps are matched; your pace slowed over time to meet my shorter stride. I glance at you, noting your focused gaze. Your gray-blue eyes were the first thing I noticed, so many years ago.

It’s cold. We wouldn’t have come out, if this wasn’t the day for rations. We all flock to the delivery site, insects scrambling for crumbs. As we walk back to our dingy apartment, the decay permeates everything… including our love.

(word count: 100)

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About Dawn Quyle Landau

Mother, Writer, treasure hunter, aging red head, and sushi lover. This is my view on life, "Straight up, with a twist––" because life is too short to be subtle! Featured blogger for Huffington Post, and followed on Twitter by LeBron James– for reasons beyond my comprehension.
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45 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: From The Inside Out

  1. Cathy Ulrich says:

    Dawn,
    You’ve captured the essence of this shot in all of it’s decrepitude. Yes, that is apparently a word because my auto-correct fixed the spelling for me! 🙂

    Cathy

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  2. Fits perfectly with the photo.

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  3. mamaheidi60 says:

    Perfect story for the photo, both of which I love! I am so amazed, always, at how you can pull out such descriptions and emotions in just 100 words. In the words of one of my little ones, read this with a 3 year old voice: Good one, Dawn!

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  4. What a sad turn. Love the line about the insects scrambling for crumbs.

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  5. This is almost like two stories..the love story and the decay which leave me wondering what has really happened… I’m drawn to something dystopian… excellent writing as usual.

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    • Thanks Björn… the image definitely brought a dystopian image to my mind, and I saw both the world around them and the couple falling into this state. I always appreciate your thoughtful comments; thank you!

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  6. Dear Dawn,

    Björn took the words right out from under my fingers. 😉 Your story has a dystopian feel to it just the mention of rations. At the same time there’s a love story there and so much more story layered between the lines. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle (Not sure about all of those balls.)

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  7. Danny James says:

    A light at the end of the story.

    DJ

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  8. Ooo! That took a turn I didn’t expect. And it worked with the photo perfectly. Well done!

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  9. Sandra says:

    I think the first paragraph in itself is a story – a love story of give and take, togetherness. The contrast with the second paragraph, the slight tainting of the relationship – beautifully done.

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  10. Until I read the comments, Dawn, I was thinking of the many refugees. It also fits the dystopian theme. Well written with great feeling and description. — Suzanne

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  11. rgayer55 says:

    I’m sad that their flame is flickering to the point of going out. Love is all encompassing and all important. Without it, the future isn’t worth living.

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  12. gahlearner says:

    This is too sad. Love often fades over time, but if it fades because it can’t endure difficult circumstances, it is especially painful. Excellent story and I thought dystopian too.

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  13. ceayr says:

    Wonderfully, if bleakly, positive.
    Until the last 3 words.
    Loved it all.

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  14. Alice Audrey says:

    Sad to see love decay like that.

    Great story! I hope you’ll read mine here.

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  15. Amy Reese says:

    Beautifully written, Dawn and such a multi-layered story. You accomplished so much in 100 words. Their relationship, the environment, the world they’re living in, the past, present. Well done!

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  16. liz young says:

    Your story reminds me of the cockroaches I saw swarming once – not a pleasant memory, though well written.

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  17. It gives me a feel of 1984 and the end of civilization as we know it, but love still thriving. Or at least still thriving as best it can. Interesting piece, they still have something.

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    • Hmm, interesting, Perry. I loved that movie when it came out, and of course the book is haunting! Hadn’t thought of it, but of course it’s all in the gray room and must play a role in what I write. 😉 Thanks for the feedback!

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  18. The romantic in me finds this to be a very sad story Dawn. There is so much emotion in so few words.

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  19. Dale says:

    One would hope that such a deep love would continue through the most difficult times…

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  21. Very intense, how disappointing yet realistic that love too crumbles down.

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  22. Martin Flux says:

    Sometimes difficulties help love thrive. Sometimes, as in this story, they cast a shadow over it. I really liked your story, Dawn!

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