Friday Fictioneers: Something’s Fishy Here


friday-fictioneersIt’s time for Friday Fictioneers again, the greatest free show in town!  Rochelle Wisoff-Fields runs this band of merry writers, where participants are asked to write a 100-word story, with a beginning, middle and end, using a photo prompt. It’s a wonderful challenge with lots of interesting outcomes. Check out other participants here.  Rochelle’s is particularly great this week!  My story is 99 words.

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I’m going a little dark this week, in honor of All Hallows– dark humor for balance.

Image: Douglas M. Macllroy

Image: Douglas M. Macllroy

“Don’t be koi with me, Sparkle,” the great, spotted fish hissed. “You know damned well there was something fishy about those guys.”

Sparkle’s sleek gold body twitched. “I told you, they threw the meat in and laughed; that’s all. ”  She shuddered, remembering the dark faces, as they dropped the food.

“What did they say, again? It must mean something!”

“They said: ‘Jackie’s sleeping with the fishes now.’ It’s silly, aren’t we all?”

“That stuff looked familiar­– texture was all off. I’ll get to the bottom of this.” Spots circled away.

“Leave that to Joe; he’s a bottom feeder.”

(99 words)

About Dawn Quyle Landau

Mother, Writer, treasure hunter, aging red head, and sushi lover. This is my view on life, "Straight up, with a twist––" because life is too short to be subtle! Featured blogger for Huffington Post, and followed on Twitter by LeBron James– for reasons beyond my comprehension.
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72 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: Something’s Fishy Here

  1. Dan Hennessy says:

    Great juxtaposition of light humorous with deadly serious . Very intriguing in the short space . Great !

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  2. Great minds think alike! I am honored to share (almost) the same title with you this week. But in Blackness you are way ahead, great stuff (Is there an “It” too many or is the Koi stuttering?

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    • Indeed! I’m working on a big project, but will be over to check out other posts, later today. Guess that gets me down to 99 words; thanks for the great catch! (see what I did there, pun?) Thanks so much for checking out TFTM this week, and taking the time to comment. Your time is much appreciated! 🙂

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  3. denmother says:

    Fun story! Poor old Joe kind of gets the short end of the stick here. Actually, Jackie’s the real loser I guess.

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  4. susanissima says:

    Hilarious! You have a knack for flash fiction, Dawn. More!

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  5. Anja says:

    lol Love the dark humor in this!!! I am still trying to get use to the 100 word limit and you do it brilliantly.

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  6. kz says:

    that’s perfectly balanced darkness and humor 🙂 great story, definitely enjoyed this

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  7. Mike Lince says:

    Hah – you had me hooked right from the beginning. Nice catch! 😉

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  8. draliman says:

    Ha, great! I particularly liked “don’t be koi with me” – very witty! 🙂

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  9. Love the puns. Koi-t funny! (I didn’t like my pun though.)

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  10. mike olley says:

    Nice gangland take on the fish characters. You can always depend on Joe to do a good clean-up job.

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  11. Cathy Ulrich says:

    Dark and funny a the same time! I find it fascinating how a photo can spark these stories in you, Dawn. Great job!

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    • I have found it to be a really fun challenge… I look at the photo, first thing every Wed… then wait to see what story pops up. This one, happened as I wrote. Literally, line by line I wasn’t entirely sure where it was going. So fun! thanks for following along, Cathy.

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  12. Sandra says:

    Funny and clever at the same time. Great opening line. Well done.

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  13. Linda Vernon says:

    Ah! What nice dark humor to go with my dark-chocolate Halloween candy! Well done — love that first line.

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  14. vbholmes says:

    You’re definitely on with the puns today although I’m casting my net for Sparkle–she’s the catch of the day.

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  15. Ha – somethings asleep at the bottom of the pond

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  16. My mind is going two different places — one bad and once even worse. I hesitate to say more in case children may be reading.

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  17. MissTiffany says:

    Such a punny contribution to this week’s prompt! Good fun.

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  18. Such a clever and funny story with a dark subtext. Flash fiction at its best. Karen

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  19. Dear Dawn,

    There are too many bottom feeders like Joe. They’re not Kosher you know. 😉

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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  20. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Dawn,

    A lovely, bottom feeding take on the prompt. You mixed it up and then shook it out and all the pieces fell into place. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  21. We did have a similar idea with this one, although I like your punny twist on it. 🙂

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    • Thanks David. The challenge is always so much fun, but it’s a blast to see what each of us does with it. Great minds… right? 😉 Thanks for taking the time to visit TFTM, and for sharing your thoughts. Much appreciated.

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  22. Eating raw meat can be dangerous, but not as dangerous as what happened to Jackie. Dark story indeed. Hope someone gets below the surface and justice flows. Ron

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  23. Oooh, Dawn, I love the dark with the humorous. The fishes will take care of it, at the bottom feeders!

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  24. gingerpoetry says:

    really black – do lunch or be lunch 🙂
    Liebe Grüße
    Carmen

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  25. LOL. Fun and dark. THe perfect Halloween timed post. 🙂

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  26. CherryPickens says:

    All the excellent puns make this fun read one to take in again and again. I especially like the last line. Bottom feeder, indeed!

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  27. Madeline says:

    Haha, I love it! Really made me laugh, although perhaps it shouldn’t have made me laugh so much! 😉 Loved the photo prompt as well, you stuck to the 100 word limit really well as well! Amazing! 🙂

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  28. pattisj says:

    Fun read, Dawn. I was wondering about the texture being off–concrete shoes?

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  29. Clever tale. Nice word play.

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    • Thanks Tony! I had a lot of fun with it… and had to go in a totally different direction for this week! That’s the best part of Friday Fictioneers.

      Thanks so much for checking out TFTM, and taking the time to leave your thoughts. Much appreciated! I hope you’ll read some more and let me know what you think.

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