Friday Fictioneers: By The Sea…


Lack of sleep may be my friend this week, and I may actually score an early spot in this cue! Yee-haw!

Each week on Friday Fictioneers, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields leads a group of writers from all over the globe, in a flash-fiction challenge. A single photo prompt; a story that has a beginning, middle and end; a goal of 100 words– everyone is welcome to participate. Check it out the details, and the wonderful stories in this week’s collection, here.

I always appreciate feedback, positive or constructive. Please leave a comment, and tell me what you think.

© Jean L. Hays

© Jean L. Hays

(98 Words)

“Could you please rub a little sunscreen on my back,” she whispered, his face just beside her.

He sat up and poured lotion in his palm. His hands caressed her soft skin, as he studied every freckle, every nuance of her perfect body.

“I think I would know your back anywhere, your skin and lines… no matter how many years pass, I could feel this body and know it’s yours.”

She smiled, taking in the deep cerulean water, the white sand, and his hands across her back.

Dolphins played and danced, as they made love in the sand.

Check out Tales From the Motherland on Facebook and Twitter, and follow along

** Please note that any ads visible on this page, are not endorsed by or Dawn Quyle Landau or Tales From the Motherland

About Dawn Quyle Landau

Mother, Writer, treasure hunter, aging red head, and sushi lover. This is my view on life, "Straight up, with a twist––" because life is too short to be subtle! Featured blogger for Huffington Post, and followed on Twitter by LeBron James– for reasons beyond my comprehension.
Aside | This entry was posted in Beautiful places, Beauty, Blog, Blogging, blogs, Friday Fictioneers, Life, Love, Tales From the Motherland, Weekly Writing Challenge, Writing, Writing challenge and tagged , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink.

79 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: By The Sea…

  1. Dear Dawn,

    My first thought when I saw your link was, “I hope you didn’t stay up waiting for the prompt.” 😉
    Nice pleasant beach scene. I can hear the waves and smell the lotion.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    PS Now get some sleep!

    Like

  2. Phew!
    AnElephant goes blushing into the shade.
    Nicely done.

    Like

  3. Nice image for a snowy day.

    Like

  4. Cathy Ulrich says:

    You ARE up early, Dawn! Beautiful story!

    Like

  5. Sandra says:

    Very romantic, particularly on a winter’s day. 🙂

    Like

  6. kz says:

    sigh… i loved this. made me long for summer.

    Like

  7. Carrie Rubin says:

    Now I’ve got an image of fornicating dolphins in my mind. 😉 (Sorry. I couldn’t resist!)

    Like

  8. Jan Brown says:

    Lovely–like a little vacation for my mind and soul. Well done!

    Like

  9. Love it. But the first thing that popped into my mind after I read the last sentence was doing just that on a beach in Aruba. The sand gets everywhere and it is not pleasant!

    Like

  10. helenmidgley says:

    I could smell the passion as well as the lotion, lol. Great Job 🙂

    Like

  11. Beautiful described, darling. Wish I were there…

    Like

  12. JKBradley says:

    How the slathering of lotion does lead to wonder things.

    Like

  13. The subtle use of active, passionate language really lends itself to the success of your flash. Fiction. Flash fiction. Freudian slip…my bad.
    My terrible attempt at wit aside, this is fantastic. I feel kind of trapped by prompts and I feel as if you captured the spirit of the photo prompt without sacrificing an almost erotic work’s integrity. I will study this, as I need to work this into my own prose.
    Thank you for the wonderful prose, as well as the opportunity to learn from your style. Looking forward to my future Fictioneering.
    CF

    Like

    • Well thank you so much, and welcome to Tales From the Motherland. I really appreciate you taking the time to read my work and share such a thoughtful and specific feedback. It’s always good to hear what resonates and what doesn’t! This is the 2nd week in a row that I wrote too posts for the prompt… it’s so tempting. Last week I dabbled in VERY dark, and this week soft erotica. Nothing too daring, but I wanted some heat. Glad my flash… fiction worked for you. 😉 I will check out your entry and welcome to the “club.” I warn you, it’s highly addictive and truly rewarding! Please feel free to check out other posts on TFTM and share your thoughts. Many thanks.

      Like

  14. Hi Dawn. I think I’m a little in love with him. I can smell the suntan lotion. Perfect summer’s day here and you’ve made me want to go down to the beach…

    Like

  15. pattisj says:

    I was awake until almost 5:00. Must be something going around! Or is yours jet lag induced? And you made the first row of Friday Fictioneers, too. Nice work, Dawn.

    Like

    • Thanks Patti… no jet lag. I have not mentioned it here, but I’m in the hospital. Pretty serious, and I was up all night that night… and writing is what I do, in all times of stress, celebration, contemplation… I hope to be out in the next couple of days, but may be keeping strange hours for a while, as I get better. Thanks for reading, and your support.

      Now, what’s your excuse for being up at such an unGodly hour???

      Like

      • pattisj says:

        Caffeine, apparently. I had tea at a friend’s late evening, but it was supposed to be decaf. Methinks it wasn’t. I’m sorry to hear you are in the hospital. That would explain the hours, it’s hard to sleep there! Saying a prayer for a quick recovery. Hugs!

        Like

  16. liz young says:

    you were quick off the mark! A sweet story, this one, and oh isn’t it lovely to have your back smoothed!

    Like

  17. This is a lovely sensual piece Dawn i really enjoyed it. It is summer here in Australia and our weather at present is hot, lots of sunscreen being used, I hope. Nothing better is there than soaking into a lover.

    Like

  18. Honie Briggs says:

    I can’t stop laughing about the fornicating dolphins comment.

    Like

  19. EagleAye says:

    Mmm. That’s warm and intimate. Most excellent!

    Like

  20. Oh, I have those kind of moments all that time! That is, watching dolphins on reruns of Flipper, the rest of the stuff doesn’t happen. So beautifully described, though, almost felt like I was there….

    Like

  21. MissTiffany says:

    Such a nice, happy, intimate scene. I want to go to the beach now.

    Like

  22. hugmamma says:

    Passion in the surf…so early in the morning…it’s only 8:18 a.m. where I live. At 64, I can only remember those days so long, long ago… ha, ha.

    Like

  23. rgayer55 says:

    Those dolphins are such voyeurs. I’m sure if you asked them they would say they were just were doing a scientific study of how other species mate. Don’t believe a word of it. Peeping toms every one.

    Like

  24. JackieP says:

    Ah, young love. If I had done that I would have had sand in places it shouldn’t be and we probably would have been ant bit. haha. Wonderful story of romance while the dolphins played. I enjoyed it!

    Like

  25. How perfectly lovely and dreamy, Dawn. I’ve always just loved that word “cerulean.” Oh, take me to this place!! Happy Holidays to you!

    Like

  26. Oooo that last line made me swoon! 🙂

    Like

  27. annisik51 says:

    Tell your characters it’s more comfortable (no sand) in the Caribbean Sea at 2 am nude and in the belief that you’re the only couple around with the same idea. I too wondered if you were referring to the dolphins and the humans were the onlookers! It’s Christmas confession time! 🙂

    Like

  28. Mike Lince says:

    I am catching up and I see you have shared a different facet of your creative imagination – the sensuous, sexy side. Like the old movies that panned toward the window curtains as two lovers embraced, your writing implies everything while leaving much of the imagery for the reader to fill in. Subtle and tasteful like those qualities I know you are imbued with. – Mike

    Like

PLEASE LEAVE A COMMENT; I'M LISTENING.

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s