Friday Fictioneers: A Break In The Sky

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A Break In the Sky

As sunbeams break the clouds, my joy is boundless.

The entire city laid out before me–– An adventure around every corner, mine for the taking!

Days of rain and cold have kept me still, huddled, and unwilling to venture afar; but, this sky, awash with color, dissolves my dark mood and beckons me.

I’m ready to leave behind petty squabbles and pecking order, for a while–– craving these moments of solitude and peace, so rare and precious.

The clouds have lifted. I step to the ledge, spread my wings and soar.

(91 words)

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Mother, Writer, treasure hunter, aging red head, and sushi lover. This is my view on life, "Straight up, with a twist––" because life is too short to be subtle! Featured blogger for Huffington Post, and followed on Twitter by LeBron James– for reasons beyond my comprehension.
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56 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: A Break In The Sky

  1. This is shared joy since Vancouver has finally brightened up with the first snow !

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  2. mamaheidi60 says:

    I love the imagery!

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  3. neilmacdon says:

    I’m guessing (or hoping) she/he has wings. It was too joyous to be a suicide

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  4. Dear Dawn,

    I’m hoping this is the POV of someone who really has wings, ie a bird…or figurative wings. Love the imagery.



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  5. I love reading the joy about blue skies in your piece, especially after your lamentation about dark days last week!
    I’m ready to leave behind petty squabbles and pecking order, for a while–– craving these moments of solitude and peace, so rare and precious. – Gorgeous reason for flight.

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  6. ceayr says:

    Sweet story, cleverly told.


  7. michael1148humphris says:

    I am glad someone finds adventure in the city. Do mind the overhead cables.🙂

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  8. Feels like today, with the bright blue sky and sun again. For a split second, I went macabre at the very end, but realized that was not how it was supposed to be intended. Although, with a slight change or two earlier on, you definitely could have sent it that way. Love the flying imagery at the end..

    I was up in your neck of the woods today, and on a whim, looking out at the bay as I drove, decided to pull into a park to admire the stunning view of the ocean and mountains. There was a coffee place there, and as I spontaneously went in for a cup of tea, I actually looked around the place fully expecting to see you there, typing away. There were several people escaping the cold, no doubt working on novels, or a thesis. After a quick walk around, I braved the frigid air and snapped several photos of the view (as my fingers turned into popsicles).

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  9. Cathy Ulrich says:

    Delightful, Dawn. One can’t grieve forever, I think! I love it! Hope all is well with you, dear friend.



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    • Thanks Cathy. No grief here… just one bird, deciding to embrace a nice new day. 😉 Life is good for now! I’ll be in Denver in late Dec/early Jan, but packed timing! Then off to Israel… I’ll let you know when I’m there again. xo

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  10. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Dawn,

    While researching my title I came across a series of quotes about flight from books by Richard Bach, he of Jonathan Livingston Seagull fame. Your story spoke to me right away. Well done.



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    • Doug!! Wow, so great to hear from you! It’s been way too long. I’ve missed you at FF… though, admittedly, I’ve dropped off these past few months. Thanks for stopping by!

      Jonathan was VERY much on my mind. I almost called this “Jonathan Seizes the Day.” Great minds… 😉 Be well.


  11. I’m hoping this is from the pov of someone who really does have wings – I’m assuming so since they say ‘for a while’. Lovely feeling to this piece.

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    • Thanks Claire… this isn’t a person at all, but a bird. I hoped that the “pecking order” was enough of a give away, but maybe not. Thanks for the feedback.

      And, I got a delightful surprise in the mail yesterday; thank you so much! So thoughtful, and such a great treat! Gratzi!

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  12. Iain Kelly says:

    Wouldn’t it be great to have the ability to fly – both for real and figuratively. Nice take 🙂

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  13. Michael Wynn says:

    Great description and I’ve decided they do have wings and are experiencing the great sense of freedom that comes with having them

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  14. Lynn Love says:

    A soaring, hopeful feel to this – only good times ahead I feel. Lovely writing

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  15. I love the sense of freedom at the end of this.

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  16. rgayer55 says:

    Now, if he can just find a statue or a clean windshield. He’s been holding it for days, you know.

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  17. YIKES … I must say I did feel a bit of suicide in the ending. Then, I thought about the flight of joyfulness and felt better about the ending. It could go either way. Every word is beautifully descriptive, opening a mental picture as I read it.
    I suppose since my story had mental illness in it, I may have transferred that into your story.
    Great writing again, Dawn. Have a wonderful weeked.
    Isadora 😎

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  18. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    I too felt some joy in this piece. I am feeling this is a piece written from the POV of a bird now freed to take flight.

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    • Ding, ding, ding! You win the prize LLoaDL! Yes, it’s a bird. The fact that I said it in so many comments, should be a give away, and then some of the language hints at it. But alas, the writing was clear enough, over all. Most were confused. Glad you read it as written. 🙂 Thanks for taking the time.

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  19. wmqcolby says:

    I thought of that old poem,

    “Life’s been very good to me
    I’m as happy as can be
    No happier man nowhere exists
    I think I’ll go home and slash my wrists.”

    That’s what I was thinking. But, when you mentioned JLS, then I thought, wow! It’s been a LONG time since I heard that.

    Super prose, Dawn. Five out of five Rod McKuens.

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  20. gahlearner says:

    Hah, I didn’t see it coming until the very end, even the pecking order didn’t ring the bells. I just thought she or he is going exploring for a while. But as soon as the bird took off, it was clear. Just shows that birds and people have more in common than we think. Lovely story.

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  21. I wanted to spread my wings and fly with her!

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  22. liz young says:

    I could feel how happy you were. Lovely.

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  23. I also wanted to fly when I saw the picture… great way to describe joy.

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  24. Margaret says:

    The lifting of clouds after a long spell of gloomy weather can have this effect. You’ve shown it beautifully. I love how you reveal that it’s a bird’s POV. Apart from the surprise element, it adds something to the story – even animals feel the effects of weather. (I’m a big believer that animals feel much more than we credit them with.)

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  25. Well done. You captured that moment before the leap– that hold your breath and leap second– oh so well

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  26. Great twist at the end, Dawn. I didn’t get it until the finish. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne

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